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Out of all your novels I have read so far. I truly believe that this one has the best writing. (I mean that not overall, but from the very first chapter.) Out of all the first chapters you have written, this one is the best. Glad to see your writing so strong, straight out of the starting gate! Very impressive! Well done, my friend.
I am intrigued about what will happen. Your writing makes me feel empathy for the main character. It reminds me of the old saying 'being in the wrong place at the wrong time'. (describing an unavoidable run of bad luck). I hope the character's luck has a turn for the better.
ok...I love the fact that the enemies of the Prays are like a double edged sword. Giving them very negative purposes (or characteristics) as well as very positive purposes (or characteristics), creates two things here. 1, it gives the types of enemies more depth and 2 displays the enormity of how important the Prays are.
I would change 'degenerative genetic alteration' to "degenerative genetic breakdown" or "degenerative genetic damage". The first sounds (to me ) like the DNA of cells is mutating/ evolving, while the second two imply more the idea of destruction or disease of the cells.
The first chapter has good potential. I like the plot so far. The author could improve the work further by learning more about grammer rules and making it clearer when it is Aurora thinking or speaking ( vs. when it is Lana thinking or speaking). Good luck, author!
Yes. I have not officially in my written chapters said the location is Canada, but I am working it into chapter 9
This chapter has a very intriguing plot. Not to mention I love the art on the book cover. The chapter ignites in the reader the need to read more. I want to know what happens next!