SpookierSapling
I once asked God for a bike. But I knew God didn't work that way. So I stole one and asked for forgiveness.
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SpookierSapling11dPostedI’m sorry but I think you’re writing style is a little bit boring. You explain things too much instead of actually telling the story. For example you spend paragraph after paragraph explaining why the MC can’t do this or explaining MC’s plan instead of writing more dialogue and MC’s steps toward that plan, or at least that is how I feel like it is. And you also do lots of explaining on world background, and although sometimes it is good, I feel you do it too much and it really makes the story boring for me
- SpookierSapling25dCommented
Zesty ass mf
"N-no, stop thats embarrassing, m-mou" - SpookierSapling1mthReplied to The_Only_Truth
Amaterasu is a base ability of mangekyou, but Shisui ability is unique only to him I think
This could easily be corrected with the help of Shisui's Kotoamatsuki, but even as a chakra progenitor, Yeruashi still couldn't freely use some derived abilities. - SpookierSapling1mthCommented
Adri-nii sounds better so I’ll just think of it as that
I am done with Kanna. She looks perfectly like the Anime version. I added as much of the personality of the anime version in her as I could. She also calls me Adrian nii. - SpookierSapling2mthCommentedA world that is another.
- SpookierSapling2mthReplied to GreedXIII
…my guy….what the actual flip man…
For a moment, he thought it was him, but then he realized that the position was wrong. He quickly opened the quilt to check but found with some embarrassment that there was a scarlet color there, and the source was Sarah, who was sleeping next to him. - SpookierSapling2mthReplied to SpookierSapling
- SpookierSapling2mthReplied to Darth_tempest66"Hot damn, for a high schooler, she has some knockers on her."
- SpookierSapling2mthReplied to Morg535
Thing is, it doesn’t lol. They escape and they commit more murder and tragedy and then get locked up again just to repeat the cycle. It’d actually be terrible to live in DC verse
They beat everyone around them, lock them up, and then deal with the consequences of the escape of those they've already defeated. - SpookierSapling2mthCommentedCh 19 Bad News
- SpookierSapling3mthReplied to wororrin
It’s not enslaving they are simply following their beliefs like sheep. It’s their own choice I wouldn’t use the word enslaving with religion.
"Haven't you noticed? Your mentor did not lift a finger to help me. Obviously, he disagrees with our ideology and existence. He shall gain no reward this time." - SpookierSapling3mthCommented
Save them they sound like an upright bunch
That event would eventually go down in history as one of the most infamous killings—the Slaughter of Cintra. Roy suspected that the records might be exaggerated, but it was proof that Cintra was made of brave people. Very few of them were cowards. - SpookierSapling3mthReplied to wororrin
If you don’t like the story quit reading it my guy it’s not that hard 😂
Your friend, Coral - SpookierSapling3mthCommentedThe woman who was trying to seduce Roy was the latter, but Roy didn't give in. He didn't want to get into a bad habit.