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Henry_Hyren

Henry_Hyren

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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Posted

    Pros: The story is indeed good and enjoyable, I very much liked it. The characters have their own uniqueness which mixes well with the whole story. The only thing I can say for the opposite is that, indeed, the grammar is correct but it's a bit... rough? The sentences have too many pronouns or nouns. For example, the I's in every beginning of the sentences, but as the story goes on, it becomes better. I'm loving the book more and more, I hope you keep writing 馃槉

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    Oblitus Regina [Forgotten Queen]
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to Readoholic

    Omg! someone finally noticed the tags馃槅 I've been waiting. Thanks for the praises, I'll try to update more in the future

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    Lightning's Attraction
    Eastern FantasyHenry_Hyren
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Posted

    Games are not my cup of tea, but this sure is! The first few chapters gives you the general idea of the author's capabilities in terms of writing and behold! She's a master. Everything's perfect, even the flow of the story and also the interactions. The character and plot advancements are also well made, I hope to see more

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    Serendipity - A wink from the fate
    Contemporary RomanceReadoholic
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to Dann_Giovanni

    no 馃槶馃ぃ but I know they're not the greatest. I just patched up some words together, and some doesn't have meaning. But others do and they can give a little spoiler

    Ch 2 Promise of a Title
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    Lightning's Attraction
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to uniqueanime2

    Thanks, I've found that my characters need more improvement, but I've paid attention to their names so you should definitely check it out

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    Lightning's Attraction
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to Dann_Giovanni

    Thank you very much for truthfully informing me of things I need to improve on. Your honest opinion is really inspiring me to become a better author. I'll pay more attention to them.

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    Lightning's Attraction
    Eastern FantasyHenry_Hyren
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to DaisukiDayoSenpai

    i'll keep that in mind, it's really helpful since i have a hard time at those, thanks again

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    Lightning's Attraction
    Eastern FantasyHenry_Hyren
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to JustLikeWriting777

    thanks, i plan on expanding more on the plot later on. I'm glad that you find it satisfactory

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    Lightning's Attraction
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Posted

    Reading this at night is really something, but the words convey the right feelings and emotions. It makes the reader curious and expectant, while also scared, in the first few chapters. It's a novel with great emotion so I would definitely recommend it. And comment on the cover: Gotta agree, haha.

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    They Fall Apart
    Horror&ThrillerJustLikeWriting777
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to pelzy

    馃様 I'll reluctantly let him go UwU

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    Mrs. Zhang! Hello
    Contemporary Romancepelzy
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to Avery_Sky

    I'm grateful that you're trying my novel, although it's not ur usual. Thanks for your feedback, it really boosts my confidence

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    Lightning's Attraction
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to DaisukiDayoSenpai

    I will try my best to improve, Thanks for the advice, I really needed that. I hope that in the future, u can give more comments for me to improve on

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    Lightning's Attraction
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to pelzy

    ahaha, thanks for ur encouragement, I'll work hard

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    Lightning's Attraction
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Posted

    Excuse me author, u sure this is your first dystopian book? I'm beyond words at how perfect this is. Everything is well matched, and I must say that this can easily over pass the contracted stories. I feel that there are more to expect from the plot development and I can't wait to read more

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    Runners Survivors
    Sci-fiDaisukiDayoSenpai
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to RachelleWolf

    Thanks, It feels good to be complemented, haha

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    Lightning's Attraction
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to RachelleWolf

    thanks, I will when I finally edit it in a few days

    Ch 3 Caught
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    Lightning's Attraction
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Posted

    Ya'll be sleeping on this. The words and phrases used are very eloquent but easy to read. It's descriptive and enjoyable. Not to mention that the plot is something to look forward to. There's love, there's fighting, it's all a mystery until you decide to read it. Btw, It's completed too. *Wink Wink*

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    Where the Stars Take Us Vol 1- Sand to Brick
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to deepu_

    thanks, those are what I've been trying to achieve, but I'll work hard to improve more, haha

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    Lightning's Attraction
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Replied to ZeusTheOlympian

    Thanks for your thoughts. I will try to improve more in the future. Your and the other's reviews are really helpful in aiding me become a better writer. I really appreciate it.

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    Lightning's Attraction
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  • Henry_Hyren
    Henry_Hyren2yr
    Posted

    As a reader, I feel like the beginning/introduction was very long, but at the same time, I liked how descriptive it was. The words used were ones that are eloquent but easy to understand. It really gives the story a smooth flow. The MC's perseverance and dedication are attractive. His Oath made in chapter 3 was very reasonable and realistic considering his circumstances. The story is in the eastern world, but all the interactions are very realistic and logical. I hope to see more.

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    Monarch of Time
    Eastern FantasyZeusTheOlympian
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