"The best way to get started is to quit talking and begin doing."
I have dropped this novel due to my family situation and health issues. I apologize to all people who have been invested and investing in this novel. I would love to continue writing this novel and TFITP, but I just don't have the energy and inspiration to continue anymore. I am really sorry to all my readers and supporters.
Although there are only 6 chapters, this is a very good contemporary romance novel. Sarah is the main character and after dying from a bombing event, she transmigrates into a side novel character that she had previously been reading about a week before, Lydia. Lydia, the side novel character, is very weak and easy to bully - which is why all of the mansion servants do not respect her. However, once Sarah transmigrates into Lydia, she completely changes the original personality of Lydia - someone weak tempered and shy - into someone wild and brave. Now, Lydia's (Sarah) main goal is to get divorced thus she is showing a rude and bad-tempered side to the male lead. I think the male lead loves Lydia? To be honest, none of the actions in the 6 chapters show me anything about his love aside from him behaving very desperate when Lydia was about to die after being schemed against by her sister. The lowest rating that I gave this novel is for the writing quality. Despite everything else is okay, I think that there can be an improvement in the writing. Many of the sentences are cut short, making it hard to understand what is going on. At the same time, there are too many usages of commas when you could obviously just start a new sentence. *This is just a small complaint of mine: The chapters are very short and I hope they can get longer in the future. As an author myself, I know that trying to improve word count is pretty hard though, so good luck to you! **I think that this novel has a lot of potentials as time passes. However, for now, I'll wait for more chapters to be published before saying that this novel is an absolute artwork.
I think starting from this paragraph and down, you should write these as auxiliary chapters instead of the main chapters. "This storyline is about two young adults in the same university who come from two totally contrasting family backgrounds and also have very different personalities. There is a saying that goes, "Love begins with a smile." However, this story contrasts with, "Love begins with hate." I think you should write this paragraph like this to make it better for reading, especially splitting the paragraph since you have two completely different topics going on.
"There are a variety of people all around the world and all are unique. There are the rich, the poor, the middle class, the people of different races, the people of different religions, the people of diverse cultures, the people who speak different languages, the people of different sexualities, and etc.,." Since this is the preamble, I think it sounds much better adding the "the" in front of the listed things. I don't know, with the addition of "the" it sounds more like something that an actual government of anybody would write.
"There are no accidental meetings between souls." - God I think it's much better without the caps.
Because there is only 1 chapter, I won't give a low rating for the plot or anything. However, there could be some improvement in the writing quality. The synopsis could use more paragraphs/splitting. Not only that, chapter 1 - The Preamble could use some editing because the paragraphs look really strange. At the same time, the middle/ending of the chapter are just the lists of characters and these should go in the auxiliary chapters instead of the main chapters.
Lol Even Lu Tingxiao's parents were beginning to think he was gay, but then he started showing feelings for Ning Xi. And then, he just had to kiss her during Lu Jingli's bachelor party while she was dressed as Tang Xi. XD Poor Jingli who's mom just kicked his door open while he was sleeping naked just to ask him if Lu Tingxiao was just using Ning Xi as a cover for his gayness.
I just wonder, but like… How did Tang Luo’s clothes fit Lu Tingxiao’s body? I mean…he’s supposed to be a giant.
Lu Tingxiao probably decided to head to Ning Xi now because he knew that without Little Treasure, Ning Xi would not be as close. You guys, he’s been scheming for her hand in marriage since he first princess carried her in the club.
Lu Corporation techs so advanced. 😂😂😂
Well, he already did collar her the moment he managed to tell her that he did not allow her to leave yet.
Her life was literally over. Her single life that is.