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This is what you called degression of plot, forcing a certain situation and decision just to make it more interesting, which usually have an opposite effect. This will give the reader a bad experience at reading and usually drops it after a couple more chapter. You actually have an amazing start, like it was interesting, thinking this is probably a gold, but wait, its just a fools gold.
This is my first review and I don't have much experience but i hope it helps. so lets get started. MC's personality: I say its pretty good, i don't have much to say 'cause its only 10 chapters or so but you can expect a typical decisive MC troupe. MC's Golden Finger: I specially like his cheat/system. It does'nt make him too overpowered nor there is a system fairy to. The system seems like fair to me. World Background: nothing much to say, just similar to "My vampire system" but with Gods and monster instead of Dalki and invasion. But don't get the wrong idea, there is no invasion here except for the dungeon suddenly springing up everywhere. And whats the best is the possible plot line why suddenly the Catholic God suddenly disappear. MC's Goal: Seems like he wants to save somebody, its a used plot but at least he has a motivation. This is up to chapter 9. Overall it is worth a read. You can criticize me if you found my review unacceptable I am open for it.
hmmm, I can accept the sudden growth but i how can he kill a goblin when he is only a cat? much less a juvenile cat... This is breaking the immersion of the story making things for the readers to relate. I know you wanted the mc to interact with the other character(s) so you can progress with your plot, but please don't look it too forced... still i like it and continue reading.