screw the husband! he is terrible!

Thank you so much!

Ok so good chapter one. My only suggestion is to go back and separate the paragraphs you have because they appear to be jumbled together.

I'm definitely digging this so far! What funky dreams he's having. He'd better not ignore an angels advice, delusions or not! The writing is fantastic and clear. The world building is great.

Fantastic story so far. I really feel bad for taka and can't wait to see how he progresses. 10/10 will keep reading. A few minor grammer mistakes here and there but otherwise worth the read.

Great first chapter opening! I was in the edge of my seat waiting for something to happen.

Ok so I love how in depth the world building is. It's fascinating to see Gabriantheus take on a role he crafted for himself and see how he views himself and the ideas of good and bad. I'm interested to see if he intends to make himself the villain and give those morally aligned souls a chance to "defeat" him. I also want to see how he interacts with other beings. definitely going to keep reading this one!

Ok so I love how in depth the world building is. It's fascinating to see Gabriantheus take on a role he crafted for himself and see how he views himself and the ideas of good and bad. I'm interested to see if he intends to make himself the villain and give those morally aligned souls a chance to "defeat" him. I also want to see how he interacts with other beings.

As the author it should be me who breaks the ice here. In this story you will find a female protagonist who's fighting her own childhood trauma while chasing after taboo love with an older man. She'll discover a world she never knew but was always right on the edge of. Her friends will hold her up and she will be their support. There will be heart ache, monster fights, flirting, dubious consenting kisses and visiting other worlds so stay tuned!