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NaphtaIi

NaphtaIi

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Love creating things, stories and music. However I'm also a writer, check out my work you might like it.

2019-12-25 JoinedUnited States
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    Very interesting start! Don't be shy let's have some more!!!

    Ch 1 Am I Thor?!
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    I'm Thor?!
    Fantasy ¡ Lord_Breezy
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    although i love it so far I don't know if they would use those curse words. If you use those already in Star Wars that'll be great!

    When I arrive the door opens before I even walk up to it. "Val, you brown haired basic looking motherfucker how are you ?" The sarcasm practically drips from his mouth. "I'm good you spiky headed fuck but credits are getting short and I need another job." I can't help but smile seeing this short person they call a man.
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    Star Wars The New Republic
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    Good job on this one!

    The aura of my saber then grows cold and hostile, and desperate? At this point, my expression is stone cold. This is not the Order that I had sworn to serve, that I had dedicated my life to. I raise my knee from the ground and face Windu with a look of disgust, but try to keep my tone polite, "Master Windu, I must ask that you please allow me to keep my lightsaber, this lightsaber is unlike most, it has become like a piece of me, I must ask you to please allow me to keep it."
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    The Bastard Jedi
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
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    I don't know about this because I don't think anyone in their right mind would convict someone just because they were a apart of something that changed to being bad later on, however the Jedi were blind so I'll let it pass.

    All in favor of expelling Eren from the Jedi Order for crimes against the Jedi including but not limited to, murder, slaughter of fellow Jedi, use of the darkside, excessive violence, disobeying the Jedi Code, and Corruption. Please raise your hand."
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    The Bastard Jedi
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    I don't think he says "hmmm," all the time but aight

    "Jedi knight from over five millenia ao you are hmmm. Very young but fought in many battles you have hmmm. The ability to use Force Ice you have hmmm. Correct this is?" The man asks.
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    The Bastard Jedi
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    It's that guy Kenobi 🙏🏾

    I'm now standing a a large circular room with window lining the wall in the room, twelve seats line the walls in a half moon. In the middle sits a small green man, to his right a man in his late forties who had dark skin and a bald head. On the other side of yoda sits a man with a clean cut beard and incredible hair, if I had a girlfriend I would definitely have to hide him from her.
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    The Bastard Jedi
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    Love how you made her very curious almost to the point of annoyance, it is very much like her when I first saw her!

    "So um, what was it like? Back then, the war against the Sith and all." She asks curiously.
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    The Bastard Jedi
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    thanks for the chapter, hope to see longer ones tho 😄

    Ch -16 A New Era
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    The Bastard Jedi
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    I'll assume his name is Dagger haha

    "Dageer... Dageer. Thank you sir! I will be sure to tell him."
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    Broke: A Clone Wars Tale (Star Wars)
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    omg piell is in here

    "Talking with General Piell can be worse than fighting a thousand droids."
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    Broke: A Clone Wars Tale (Star Wars)
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    oh yeah! this will be fun

    Ch 8 Kill Some Droids
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    love this inciting incident...very intriguing

    Ch 4 Crash
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter!!!

    Ch 6 Searching for A Smuggler's Space Cruiser
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    Galaxy Wars: The Legacy of Light and Darkness
    Sci-fi ¡ ranmaro
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  • NaphtaIi
    NaphtaIi3yr
    Commented

    Nice beginning four chapters!

    Ch 5 The Awakening 4 'Last Part'
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    Galaxy Wars: The Legacy of Light and Darkness
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