I'm currently on chapter 13 and the story is going quite well, it has good grammar and plot, I hope it continues like this.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Thanks for the chapter, one thing that was uncomfortable to read and didn't add up was when he asked for the water and told her why he was asking for the water.
La idea del fanfic es muy buena, pero creo que falla en que es muy apresurado todo, hubo ocasiones en que tuve que leer varias veces para comprender, me da la impresión de que el autor escribía para si mismo y no pensaba desde la perspectiva del lector, creo que una reescritura le vendría bien.
regulation I hope that PJ learns to fight, first the friend and now the new boy at any moment receives a beating, he seemed like a very good person and quite naive until now. The rest is pretty good, the fanfic is solid.
Thanks for the chapter, I'm watching this after letting the chapters accumulate, so I don't remember the personality of the protagonist, but I felt it was silly.