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u do realize that the west didn’t make guns first right. Ur argument falls apart the instant u look at history. Follow that with how most western countries are in debt with said eastern hegemon and it’s a question of when not how the far east will eventually take over our country
We are referring to a YouTuber called Smii7y. This is a long running inside joke on his channel.
I just got to ch35 and am not sure if buying the later chapters are worth it. Pros: It was an interesting story with a cool premise and character development. Cons: The writing is subpar at best. I could easily fix half the problems using the free version of grammarly. The problem that irked the most was the bad pacing and storybuilding half the time. There are scenes that the mc is supposed to have a development in, and by the end of the development I can’t/don’t see any change. This is expounded by the times the author realized he forgot to explain something and just suddenly threw it in with no context or better explanation behind it. The author even forgets to explain ther world, I.e. worldbuilding, when it’s needed to expound on the situation. This is probably one of the worst uses of time skips I’ve ever read. It’s like I’m going to have to train, proceeds to skip any kind of explaination of the world and any systems he will use to train, jumps to end and has barely had half a point to 1 point of growth when he is supposed to be beyond 6 points. It’s completely off the rails. Then there is the characters that he apparently introduces himself to to use them later. Then proceeds to not give anymore character building on any of the characters except for their introduction and his description of their traits. Very little else there. Then there are the status screens. They don’t mean anything to the readers except to fill word count. There are even 2 times where the author copy pasted the stat sheet and there were no changes to it. It’s like the age old setting, show proof/growth through actions not words. None of the upgrades in stats seemed to improve the mcs abilities. At no time does he even use these stats corrects. A grade 3 fighter punches our newly grade 2 mc(2 is way weaker than 3) and he doesn’t explode. Considering 10 in stats is the threshold in superhuman. The mc was at 11. The enemy was in the 20s. The dude is twice as strong as the mc and he is somehow able to fight back. Just too much of a stretch there. Overall, I liked the story so far and the plot. Just too many skips and lack of character building all around. Tips for the author: Don’t use training time skips if u haven’t explained how the mc is going to train. Don’t give character intros if all they are important for is filler or u are just going to skip all the possible interactions between the mc and them.
Villains advantages I guess. Usually the beginning characters are less well off, not in growth opportunities/speed but starting point.
All those negatives would also throw away the negatives, u realize right. Being blessed gets rid of negative health issue which in turn means that all he is breathing in is awful smelling air. None of the effects would affect him, the same reason alcohol doesn’t get him drunk. Getting drunk could be a similar condition to getting high or feeling the effects of nicotine. Basically, there is no reasonable explaination for even feeling like smoking when it shouldn’t affect him in any way. So, the only explanation is the author thoughts character that wears shades and smokes is a great hero mc. Honestly I feel like the author stepped in a bad stereotype by making a black mc that drinks and smokes constantly.
No, by Chang’e which is a Chinese, I believe, moon goddess
Do u realize how controlling the cloud are of their people. They were even more barbaric and ruthless with their experiments. And do u think one of those nations wouldn’t make some advantageous deal to steal information about ur abilities from u or ur former allies. There is a big reason that cloud didn’t take over konoha. The resources and environment. It is very telling when u think only one clan, even if they are the uchiha, can change the balance of power.
Wouldn’t the question be wrong place not school, or question would be why are there only girls
Nevermind about not trained but still a new body
And proceeds to lose his balance due to performing a move he has no training to produce and most likely a concussion at least
Take in mind that I usually don’t like 1st person writing. First for the good parts: it has a decent premise and has good plot. Bad parts: First is the horrible choice in what,1-3, person the story should be written. Throughout the novel the author switches between 1st, 2nd, and 3rd person. The author also seems to be writing in third person and then just replacing all the he with I. It turns out very striking when the mc is talking about himself in an outsiders(3rd persons) perspective but sticks with I throughout. The author also likes to have sentences describing scenes with you(2nd person) perspective and then follows with a 1st person sarcastic comment. It is so bad that I had to stop early. Character design is kinda influenced by the above problem. The mc seems very apathetic and distant. This is further exacerbated by the seemingly sarcastic comments made by the mc along with the serious 4th wall breaking moments. It really takes a lot away from the story and made me drop the book after the 5th time seeing it happen. Note to author: Stick with 1 perspective. Don’t assume that the readers know everything about the one piece series. Don’t make mc comments different from how you describe the world. If u describe, for example, a teleportation as flashy and unexpected( again with the sudden perspective change) don’t follow it up with the mc saying it is normal. Who is the mc talking to? The reader, obviously, but keep ur stories contained in the story!!! Don’t try to comment on imaginary, in the mcs perspective, people. It just drives me to believe the mc is psychotic. This isn’t helped by the attitude and personality traits u decided to give ur mc.
I hate it when authors keep switching between 1st and 3rd person bc they couldn’t be bothered to stick with 3rd person writing. It just keeps showing how decent storytelling is ruined by horrible writing and forced dialogue
Not unexpectedly bc the mc expected to appear author
Now I realize what was bugging me. Author stop saying I said. Just leave the mcs lines alone without any designation bc it is as if u are double stating who is saying it. Only designate a speaker when it is someone other than the mc
Would have assumed that he would have missed at best due to the opponent striking while the mc is doing extra actions like sheathing his sword
But blocking and parrying are stop gaps to attacking. The point is that taking the time to enter that stance puts the mc in an even more disadvantageous position than if he kept attacking normally. There is a reason iada users don’t keep sheathing the blade over and over again. It’s only really at the beginning and when trying to disrupt attacks. But the mc is in the back foot and any swordsman will take advantage of this rather stupid extra action
This ‘simple’ assumption is based entirely on the iada user being way faster than the opponent. NOT in a losing battle
It’s actually more horrible for ur organs and blood flow. If gravity was stronger, our heart would have to beat harder which would cause it to damage itself. The increased pressure would also cause damage withing all the organs that need that blood. So more than likely ur heart would fail before any other part of u died
Just the petal, not the entire tree, would do