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Wanda , Jean Grey, Storm
I just think that him acting like a complete brat and everyone just accepts it to be rubbish. Going around giving powers like that is foolish and should never be done. Logan is still loyal to the professor and a simple button press doesn't change it. Also I would like to remind the author that darkside is not all powerful and has been defeated many times.
Bard
It is a great fanfic. Language is good. Story is great. The only complaint I have is that you skipped the training stage and directly made him op. I didn't get to see him recruit his crew. How he trained Haki and so on. Although you are trying to do this using flashbacks it just doesn't get the same hype.
I disagree ,Joffrey was a full blown lunatic. He killed everyone he didn't like. Edward on the other hand does everything with a purpose. Nothing is wrong with taking care of themselves and their children.Especially in the world of GOT.We all saw what happened to the starks for being honourable.
Saving Lyanna probably will **** up this story. Then he would have to deal with a women who deeply cares for Jon and he would need to intervene for Jon's benefit. He can't just kill Jon since he is a vital part of the plot. And if being raised by Lyanna gives Jon ambition the story would change in a way I don't prefer since mc is not Jon .
I really like your story.It is my personal belief that your fanfic has great potential and I really enjoyed it because it has all that I would want in such a story. The mc is strong and independent, it isn't the save the world bullshit, the mc has ambition rather than going with the flow and I really love the will to leave a legacy behind.