the mc is kinda annoying

This is your second attempt to correct the inconsistencies from the last fic you wrote and lemme tell you that you absolutely blew it. I suggest you to find another hobby or passion cuz writing stories is bot for you

bs.

cringey lines from sakumo

The story has a gary stu type of mc where he could do no wrong and is always an upright outstanding citizen of konoha that embodies the will of fire propaganda BS. The setting is underdeveloped, the fight scenes feels illogical and underwhelming. Some plot points feels forced. The story is good to pass the time and doesn't require braincells to understand. quite barebones

thank god that you stopped writing this story. it was becoming terrible

your bad writing skills is starting to show itself.

ew gary stu mc

what does his projection jutsu actually do? The explanation was just a bunch of nonsense. It had no substance to the explanation. How was it a killing move? what does it specifically do?

Tsunade in this fic doesn't feel like Tsunade from canon. It has an ooc feel to it, feels like a different character all together

the story is quite terrible to be honest, the story is boring and weird at the same time. hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhjhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

the entire story seems too convenient for the mc. The mc has literally faced no setbacks, opposition and struggle. The way he confidently dismisses more powerful people than him is frankly laughably absurd because we all know he ain't that smart and charismatic enough to not get burned by daemon or ruined by his own hubris.

From a dragon, he now has the ability to turn into a human. why make him a non human in the first place you could have just made him a powerful valyrian sorcerer in the beginning. no need for the whole nonsense you pulling off now.

a whole lot of nothing is happening. gonna dropped until theres like 200 chapters or something. Individual chapters are so short that five chapters of this story would equal one normal chapter.

this story feels like it was made by ai......................,...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................,...............................................................,.......................................................................,. ................

This story is slowly getting worse with all of this filler stuff

these characters don't act like those in the books or in the show. The way they react to certain situations is completely different from the source material. the only character i see that reacts or behaves like from the source material is robert baratheon.

no

Its another run of the mill op mc story. Terrible plot overall .............................................,........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

cringe, edgy teenager sh**