'As he ran, all the fat on his body was rippling and he was panting and sweating crazily' - only use one and per sentence unless a special rule applies. "anymore." Ben shouted from behind. - use a comma instead of a period. avoid run-on sentences. The paragraph about contacting his family is one long sentence. maybe break it into 2 or 3. the whole bottom part where they are talking about the 'rulers' needs to be straightened out. why is max in there?

See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

does this author consistently do 7-8 chapters a week?

Thanks for the chapter.

I can't read the last few chapters. can you please help BLIZZARD54K?

Is this book still being written, on hiatus, or abandoned? just would like to know if I should continue supporting the book.

So what's going to be the schedule from now on then?

I was just about to write something similar. I'm hoping that everything is well with the author. I'd even be patient for a while with just the promise that chapters are on their way.

I'm really excited for more chapters

See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza

"He could concentrate with more focus."