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Fortigan

Fortigan

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  • Fortigan
    Fortigan3yr
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    I'm going to be blunt and give you the good and the bad, starting with the bad. While I am really enjoying the story, it's grammatically broken in so many ways. It's not so bad that it's not readable, but the author desperately needs an editor that is fluent in English. I'd say, on average, there are at least 2 typos/grammatical errors in every paragraph. Mixing up past and present tense is a constant, words are used improperly, etc. "Was" and "were" are not interchangeable. "Pass" is not a substitute for "past" or "passed". "Redundant" does not mean what the author thinks it means. "Though" and "thought" are constantly mixed up. Most cultural phrases or saying are quoted wrong. Some stuff is just simply odd, such as "xyz character scratches their HAIR in confusion". Seriously, the list could go on forever as it's a grammatical nightmare. Now, on to the good. The characters are very interesting and there is great character development, though I'd like to see more internal group drama/interactions. The overall story is easy to get into and has excellent pacing, making it easy to binge dozens of chapters at a time. It's over the top in a carefree and fun kind of way but is balanced with occasional heavy scenes that give it more weight. While I would like a little more descriptions regarding some of the cities, it's actually very well done. An atmosphere is established for various scenes that helps build immersion. Even the political climate is touched on and affects the direction of the story. My advice for the author would be to download the Grammarly browser extension and write in google docs (as Grammarly functions there). This will not only catch a lot of mistakes, but in the process of correcting them, the author will become more fluent in English. Also, it's free.

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    Nanomancer Reborn - I've Become A Snow Girl?
    Fantasy · Reili
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  • Fortigan
    Fortigan3yr
    Replied to Rethila_Farzana

    Google search the title and you'll find the site doing the translations. The one who uploaded it here stole it from them. Over 300 chapters so far.

    Ch 235 Of Kings and Demon Lords
    altalt
    Maou Ni Natta Node, Dungeon Tsukutte Jingai Musume to Honobono Suru
    Fantasy · sani117
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  • Fortigan
    Fortigan3yr
    Replied to sociopathic_nerd

    Because it was pirated from another site to here. If you want to read it from the site that actually did the translation from Japanese just google search the title. Well over 300 chapters have been translated so far.

    Ch 235 Of Kings and Demon Lords
    altalt
    Maou Ni Natta Node, Dungeon Tsukutte Jingai Musume to Honobono Suru
    Fantasy · sani117
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  • Fortigan
    Fortigan3yr
    Commented

    I'm curious in what way that guy finds her familiar. If it's her aura, then he may have known her from her past life. If it's her physical appearance then he may have been the one who messed up her elements before awakened in that body.

    Ch 54 Auction P3
    altalt
    Nanomancer Reborn - I've Become A Snow Girl?
    Fantasy · Reili
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  • Fortigan
    Fortigan3yr
    Commented

    Why is everyone so freakishly tall in this novel? The average height of a male in the US is only 5ft 9in. And why the mix of imperial and metric. Height is always in imperial and everything else is in metric? I just don't get it.

    Ch 53 Auction P2
    altalt
    Nanomancer Reborn - I've Become A Snow Girl?
    Fantasy · Reili
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