Its just unreadable. The original world background sounded somewhat interesting, with another "reincarnation to try again" genre. With this big of a cheat, the MC is guaranteed to do very well already. Except the 10,000X Upgrade System makes the main character so absurdly powerful that after 5 chapters the MC is a literal one man army able to slay gods. There are no meaningful side characters. There are no meaningful antagonists. The main character trumps everything by virtue of existing.

what is "the compound of section B"? Perhaps use "The Section B Compound"?

"If I had a better..." -> "If I had better"

appears to be a run-on sentence. suggest "as better psyon..." -> "since better psyon"

missing end punctuation

missing end punctuation

missing end punctuation, suggest comma

view paragraph comments, put changes there

wakened -> weakened

shuder -> shudder

"towards the distance" -> missing period

"Seemingly trying her best to recover he energy" -> "Seemingly trying her best to recover her energy"...

In Soviet Russia, car drive you.

“Red flashes are outdated by galactic standards, but Ves always had a theatrical side to him. There is some sense of nostalgia that lenses without flash seem to be missing, which led to Ves’s decision to purchase an antique camera back in the Sentinel Kingdom.”

The ratio is about 1:6, but the point still stands. This translated version of the novel is trash.

Bad grammar here. Author uses passive voice and past tense here, suggesting that the system already performed the task when Qin Yi is clearly instructing the system to perform a task. Consider "System, target the deacon for extraction!" or "System, extract from the deacon!"

its just so damnably easy to corrupt someone with a pure heart... and simply impossible to revert back to a pure heart once you've been corrupted... there's no going back... enter at your own risk

i guess pet novels are popular? hard to say lul

What trash. When your novel is so bad that the only reason you can get views is because you sneakily added #TheMechTouch to the your novel tags so that it would come up when people search for the extremely popular novel "The Mech Touch", that's when you know the book is not worth reading.

google it. its a thing.