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aidanbedwell4mthReplied to PepcintuAm I imaging this or is that pic from Lego Star Wars
[Insert Image of Jedi Temple on Coruscant Here]- aidanbedwell6mthCommentedCh 4 Chapter 4 : New Arrivals
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I do not mind Horikita and Ayanakoji dating, but this is rather fast. MC literately almost killed a guy and had no fluctuations in emotions. He has dated Kei nearly a year in the light novel, but he can not understand love and wounders if he can ever feel emotions. He literately stayed in a hellish environment for all of childhood yet within a day he is already making significant progress? I'm going to stop reading currently, and come back in the future. Hopefully you will make this story more in line with the characters. I know this is a fanfiction, and I know you are probably writing for your own enjoyment, but I thought I might as well comment my thoughts on it. Good Day
Ch 4 Chapter 4: happiness? - aidanbedwell6mthCommented
I like your idea of Ayanakoji trying to be a nice person, but he is fundamentally someone who doesn't to much. This scolding seemed a bit out of character even in this fan-fiction setting. Horikita also acted to childish she has a backbone, and would immediately refuse what he said with some facts and logic. Sudo also has a lot of pride. The scene of him introducing him self seemed in character as the MC subtly praised him, but he would probably need more of a reason to apologize. I really like COTE , so I am just stating my thoughts and trying to be constructive. Overall I like the premise, and I think this story has potential, but I would suggest you edit some chapters as you go along so the characters and story flow more seamlessly.
Ch 3 Chapter 3: Pain of the lonely - aidanbedwell8mthCommentedFelix's speed in carving the magic rune was so fast that it kept the surface of the chestnut wood shining. The carving knife kept dancing as if it's writing an immortal chapter that would go down in history, rather than carving a magic rune.detailHarry Potter: A Certain Ancient Rune Professor of Hogwarts (TL)Book&Literature · Crazy_DarkSide_Cat
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It is painful every time he hits the randomize button. I have the urge to get on Skyrim and start customizing my character.
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It is not red cedar that brings luck, but redwood.
"That's it," Ollivander said happily, packing the wand into a box. "It is said that a wand made of red cedar will bring luck to the user," he added with a smile. - aidanbedwell1yrCommentedCh 3 My Disappointment is immeasurable, and my day is ruined.
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+1
2ND PLACE - Mirajane Strauss. In Patrrreon and Webnovel. - aidanbedwell2yrCommented
You can watch game plays of it because I believe you will be interested in the possibilities the game presents.
Also, Hogwarts Legacy: State of Play, is out. The game's looking dope-dope-dope. Unfortunately, I won't be able to play it. I don't have the consoles, and my laptop won't be able to run it. - aidanbedwell2yrCommentedCh 40 Serenity
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If you do decide to end AMJ after then ending you should add bonus scenes. These scenes will just give us a better idea of his life after cannon and random storylines that can pull different emotions. Alan's death could be a bonus story, a laboratory accident that has some humor, Quinn finding the path to longevity, and maybe even his death if he chooses not to purse longevity. These stories will be really fulfilling, and can end questions readers have.
Ch 312 The Second Rise - aidanbedwell2yrCommentedCh 34 Super Saiyan?
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Im not creative, but keep up the good work.
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I believe Hannibal Lector referenced himself having a mind palace.
Non-magicals use a similar method known as Mind palace, but it is but a copy of mindscape. A mindscape is much more powerful. If developed properly, you can remember every single second of your life." - aidanbedwell2yrCommented
was this before or after slavery
The United States of America . . . the land of opportunity to the non-magical world, where any dream could come true, and everyone seems to be pursuing the "American Dream." But in the magical world, it had a different, peculiar reputation of being controlling and buried in strict mandates that exercised excessive control over its magical residents and those who visited the country. The country's magical culture was shaped through its history that included the horrifying Salem's Witch Trials and nationwide hunt for magical kind, labeling them as against nature and dangerous, not to be allowed to exist, and executing them through the cruel method of burning them on stakes. [1]