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The fight scene was okay a bit crude in the way it started, if you explained he was in a trance or built up towards it it would of been fine, it felt a bit sudden (the initial engagement) every time something serious occurs try to build up momentum and youâll do fine :)
đđđ you probably could and it would be seen as a valid response
The novel shows promise with a strong plot and engaging characters, but it faces a significant hurdle that could deter readers from making it halfway. The grammar is notably subpar, with occasional translations feeling poorly executed, and the overall writing flow lacking coherence. Reading becomes a challenge, requiring constant effort. To truly shine, the novel needs thorough editing. It would be beneficial if the translator considers utilizing external tools like Grammarly for improvement.
Thatâs her personality in the show though