Haunt86
I'm a dank memer, who likes isekai to much for his own good.
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that was the joke but in context he spent 3 hours lecturing her about survival and tactical retreat.
she has hiking boots, its implied that she hikes. Solar charger is a must for hikers lol.
uhh, in english?
There is also some real issues with flow and pacing. Sometimes the story reads like its just notes you jotted down and not a real scene. Other times decisions are made in a split second with no hesitation or consideration to the possible outcome of said choice. There is, for lack of a better term off the top of my head, little REALISM to your characters sometimes. Making believeably flawed characters with their own distinct personalities is an integral part of making your story enjoyable. I think your story could really benefit from a good editor, although, I don't know if webnovel offers this to you for free. Just some thoughts, don't take it too seriously. :)