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Kenric_Brown2yrCommentedHELLL YEAH LEE ROYYYYYYYYYY JEENNNKINNNSS
This chapter has been deleted.- Kenric_Brown2yrCommentedCh 88 Hey?
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this scene Ruins immerssion by not properly scaling power levels how is he able to do all of this environmental Damage from just screaming? Shaking my head makes no sense
It was a chain reaction. First, came the shock from what I just did. Then, came the pain. Oh, the pain. It caught up to me all at once, within a split second. The sting of the first second of the bones manifesting in my body, the shredding of muscles inside my body as it forced it's way out of my skin, the feeling of my skin being skewered by the sharp bones, the gaping wound being exposed to oxygen, making it sting even more than before. The bone that pierced through on my head made blood shower all over my eyes, meaning I was blinded by my own blood. I let loose a scream of pain so loud, that it physically affected the environment. Things were blown back by the sound waves, some trees were nearly uprooted, windows broke within nanoseconds, The nearest city was somewhere around 75 kilometres away from my present location, but if the reports the came the next day were anything to go off of, people from almost all of Japan heard it, and the weather reporters noted that while the scream was ongoing, it was making literal waves in the ocean waters. Animals outside the lodge had their eardrums burst, and some even died. Lastly, the foundations of several buildings in the cities were getting weaker and weaker, and four buildings actually collapsed. - Kenric_Brown2yrCommented
your a great author
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your doing Great man
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i admit i really love your story but its truly hard not to take offense to many of the stereotypes the main character describes i csnt refute them because honestly its has a semblance of accuracy however i admit it feels extremly uncomfortable to read how a main character is openly racist to almost every other foreigner in the world and belive themselves to be a member of the most cunning and secure striving race ok the planet that being said every other aspect of this story Is truly good
"So Zita, the moment you start thinking that Asians are 'submissive' and 'docile', you've already lost the mind game because you will never see it coming once they decide to stab you in the back. - Kenric_Brown3yrCommentedCh 146 Update
- Kenric_Brown3yrCommentedCh 10 Chapter 10
- Kenric_Brown3yrReplied to Scientistx
You dont know who the mc was before hand and killing someone doesnt instanky make you “messed up” does that mean war Heros or people who kill theyre abuses are suddenly messed up? Nah theres a plethora of situations were killing someone is Either they only option or the smartest option
As for his casual murder of the goons, well, I have been dropping hints here and there in the previous chapters, but basically, Damien is trying to act like he is still a normal human. But he really isn't. Death and killing do absolutely nothing to him anymore. - Kenric_Brown3yrReplied to Ken_UzumakiCh 2 Awakening
- Kenric_Brown3yrCommentedCh 104 Storming The Castle (104)
- Kenric_Brown3yrCommentedCh 2 Awakening
- Kenric_Brown3yrReplied to Scientistx
Your confusing the mc wIth danny phantom and THATS your problem hes no danny he just has his abilities
As for his casual murder of the goons, well, I have been dropping hints here and there in the previous chapters, but basically, Damien is trying to act like he is still a normal human. But he really isn't. Death and killing do absolutely nothing to him anymore. - Kenric_Brown3yrCommented
honestly im surprised by the quality i felt i had to leave a review because of it so to start out your introductory phase Present the oc wAs well done but could have been more smoothly transitioned In the future you should think About adding a dash of foreshadowing it could be An exemplary component to your writing style your description pf the character was well done not too many details but just enough to Give they imagination a push in the right direction i think you should consider a bit Of originality in regards to his meta abilities its clear you like wolverine but another ability to help support his claws and regen couldnt hirt as long as its not op i would think About giving him something to help even the playing field down the line against people like super man or black adam maybe something along the lines of slowly growing physical strength attribute similar to one for all or zenkai boost thats All i can think of for now if theres anything else ill Come back
Ch 2 II - Kenric_Brown3yrCommented
Honestly i dont mind giving unboased reviwes however i feel its neccessary to state that unless you put out AT LEAST 5-10 chapters most people wont be willing to give the reviews you want because it could get dropped so whats even the point? To Get you have to give this is common knowledge ill stick around to see if you head my advice or not and leave a revIew every chapter STARTING at the 5th chapter
Ch -1 The Deal - Kenric_Brown3yrCommented
Is this ever going to turn into am actual piece of work or will you hust keep deleting chapters and remaking it? at first i was fully on bosrd with support but now this Just feels like your goofing around with no real interest in whst your doing i wanna stick around but im gonna have to drop if more chapters dont come soon
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His lack of care for death and killing make Him a far more interesting character than Danny
As for his casual murder of the goons, well, I have been dropping hints here and there in the previous chapters, but basically, Damien is trying to act like he is still a normal human. But he really isn't. Death and killing do absolutely nothing to him anymore. - Kenric_Brown3yrCommented
The portrayal of each character and side character vIlains included is done extremely well nearly flawless in extremely impressed please stay true to yourself and dont be mis guided by comments at the very least dont kill the story by ruining immersion and making him submissive all if a sudden weve seen thats not his mindset he has no qualms with killing nor should he if anything ive always felt batman and sups were more than a bit hypocritical in both their actions and philosophy anyways your getting all my Power stones please Keep producing such winderful work its very hard to find talented writers these days
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