if you have some way of getting contact info across, I wouldn't mind editing for you.

for most children of his age

a jacket is usually standard for a mountaineering kit, and usually goes under some things to make them more accessible, like harnesses and bags.

pale is usually an unhealthy color. a pink tint might suit more, as in darker skins the pink would not be so apparent.

seemingly usually follows an observation that would lead to this conclusion.

a small silhouette climbs the rough wood

a lone ancient tree would work better, especially as you describe its large measurements immediately after.

add some commas

benign is an odd word to describe wind, pleasant or sweet might work better

first sentence needs to hook the reader in, I would shift this sentence slightly down, let the next sentence start the story.

village of cottages surrounded by mist, with farmland not far away.

decreases year after year

surplus is used to describe a quantity more than what is needed. the word high might be better.

is the farmland in the cities, or is it around them?

the word farmland has been used alot, so try 'in the area' instead. try to keep a list of 2-3 ways of referring to something to separate them and avoid word fatigue.

the residents of the small village. the way it currently is implies that the villagers were short.

sentences that start with although need a contrasting statement. try 'Although the level of technology in the village wasn't high, it was better than the other farms in the area.'

in my opinion, a bit too much use of dreams. one after the other without something to break them up makes for awkward reading.

nice buildup. still issues with sentence structure, but still readable.

great start. the writing is a little messy, but seems easy to fix. to the author, keep an eye on sentence structure, as they are currently making this hard to read. I'll put a paragraph comment on the worse ones once I've read the avaliable chapters.