Daoist_Little_Yun
"Living is not about avoiding death. It's about making the most out of your only chance." —Daoist_Little_Yun
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Daoist_Little_Yun11hReplied to Youngmaster_JoseloCh 829 Lawrend Wakes Up Inside Of Aleshia • • • • •- Daoist_Little_Yun3mthPosted
The writing quality is quite engaging in some parts, but the author's lack of experience clearly shows in a lot of ways. The scene changes suddenly, and I feel like it lacks some depth to it. The MC was suddenly in another world after just a single paragraph. It happens fast, so it was quite disorienting for me. Not to mention the other things. The start of the chapter is not interesting at all. It was mostly boring until the demon showed up. The way the MC died is quite cliche, and it wasn't as comedic as the author definitely hoped to be. The cover is lackluster and can definitely use some help from an artist who knows how to letter a title. The synopsis is disorderly and hard to read. The author needs to format it, but not just that. I think the contents of the synopsis aren't interesting at all. This might sound nitpicky but I don't like how he put 'Chapter n' before every chapter name because the app already does that. It only makes the chapter titles look awful, in my opinion.
- Daoist_Little_Yun3mthPosted
Interested? This novel will tackle the problem of male and female equality in the present world but done in a Fantasy world. What is right? What is wrong? Hopefully, I will be able to give each side their best take. I have been preparing this novel for about 10 months. This has been rewritten multiple times and the plot has changed a lot. I'm very confident that you will like this novel of mine! Please go read it, and tell me what you think in the comments.
- Daoist_Little_Yun4mthReplied to Soorya_Koneko
Hate it when the supervisors arrives and micromanages
The male cultivator expressionlessly said to Old Man Wang, "From today onwards, the two of us will be responsible for protecting Elder Iron's medicinal herb garden. You don't need to be bothered by us. Also, don't disturb our cultivation." - Daoist_Little_Yun5mthReplied to Daoist_Little_YunCh 777 Juju Undresses • • •
- Daoist_Little_Yun5mthCommentedCh 777 Juju Undresses • • •
- Daoist_Little_Yun5mthCommentedCh 65 [Bonus chapter] Chapter 65: Little Goblin, Mel'Zeth! [R18]
- Daoist_Little_Yun6mthCommentedCh 740 Valentina
- Daoist_Little_Yun6mthCommented
There is an impostor among us
He was very pleased about it. It was a form of supernatural power told in myths and legends after all. All guys harbored absurd dreams when they were young, such as becoming a powerful sorcerer, or a mech warrior, or a magical girl, all capable of casting magic like Harry Potter. - Daoist_Little_Yun6mthCommented
There are also other methods to put a 'gene' inside of someone. If you know what I mean ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
He continued cycling leisurely on the countryside path, while shaking his head and feeling speechless. "So I'd be singing a song about me getting cheated on then, would I? Sh**, I'm never gonna put such a gene inside me." - Daoist_Little_Yun6mthCommentedCh 1 The Shadow Atop The Windowsill
- Daoist_Little_Yun6mthReplied to SoloQueen
Which forehead?
Chen Xi kissed Xu Zhi hard on the face out of excitement, before skipping off in embarrassment. - Daoist_Little_Yun6mthCommented
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"For real?" - Daoist_Little_Yun6mthCommented
I lament the fact that they were never able to enjoy the full human experience
The two legendary witches who had opened up a new era stopped before the temple. They were about to meet their end soon, and their eyes were filled with tears. - Daoist_Little_Yun6mthReplied to Officially_Undead
I approve of Circe's methods
It could even become a useful tentacle for Circe, the witch in charge of chaos and curses, for self-consolation when she had to satisfy her lustful desires. It was multi-functional and extremely useful. - Daoist_Little_Yun6mthReplied to themerkpanda
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The following year, Circe had an epiphany about evil sorcery and created the cursed voodoo doll.
