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JSirMixalotL20dCommentedI would advise you to think about a different intro. Every chapter starts the same way and invites the reader to skip the first 2- paragraphs
At the edge of the pit full of water sat a person who looked around twelve, his brown light brown hair soaked with sweat and his hazel eyes full of focus.- JSirMixalotL1mthPosted
I only read till chapter 34 so maybe it gets better later. To his first quest (around chapter 20) you could easily fit everything in 3 chapters. Introduction, joining the chat group, girls fawning over him and him blushing from every interaction with a girl. After getting the first quest you can add lemons and him acting like the MC of the original work. I hoped it would get interesting with the world travel but so far it doesn't and i can't keep reading the same shit every chapter
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Since he wants to marry every beautiful girl he sees or hears about he actually is...
"Don't worry. I won't. I know what sort of person you are. You're not someone who only thinks with his dick. The fact that you won't buy that skill that'd let you control your sperm fertility is all the proof I need. You'd only have sex with the girl you'd want to marry, and that is one of the reason why I fell even more for you." - JSirMixalotL1mthPosted
It started pretty good but when he started his music it got way too much focus and the story seemed to stagnate. It got too boring for me personally but maybe other people like 3 chapters with 80% song lyrics in it. If you ignore the music part it is a decent story with little flaws that can easily be improved upon
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Both could be DxD characters. I really like Ingvild but don't know much about Glenda besides her "raising" Lavinia Reni.
Hopefully she can get the Demon Lord to spare her friend, she can save herself, but Ingvild is far too innocent for this cruel world, no matter what her race is. - JSirMixalotL2mthReplied to Ab_Maxz
So a Sharingan can see through most attacks, even from Kage level but can't see ANYONE (who knows this "jutsu") "moving fast and leaving a log behind they have to pickup/unseal". Really picky eyes...
[A/N:I took this explanation from Reddit or somewhere. Credit to him to have explained it so well. Before starting this fic, I thought substitution jutsu was a space-time jutsu. I blame the other fanfics for depicting it as such] - JSirMixalotL2mthReplied to
Exactly, they are the elite because you can't outrun their perception. Thank you for making my point
[A/N:I took this explanation from Reddit or somewhere. Credit to him to have explained it so well. Before starting this fic, I thought substitution jutsu was a space-time jutsu. I blame the other fanfics for depicting it as such] - JSirMixalotL2mthCommented
I think in canon je didn't have one at this point. Just the unique skill Sloth.
So that's one of the Primordial Angels according to Ramiris. One with an Ultimate Skill as well. - JSirMixalotL2mthCommented
i am too lazy to check but i think i read that's impossible to bring people to other worlds in the aux chapter
The only requirement is that they accept. And the restriction is that I can't assimilate them, when they become cards. Just re-summon them. - JSirMixalotL2mthReplied to IND_Monarch
then why isn't he healing himself while thinking what to do next?
With his heart pounding and mind spinning in search of solutions, Lucius prepared to use Teleport again. The Juggernaut, unshakable and merciless, continued its relentless pursuit. With each teleport, Lucius barely managed to maintain a safe distance, his strength rapidly diminishing with each movement. - JSirMixalotL2mthReplied to IND_Monarch
so? he should be healing himself since the first time he got hit. As you said it cost nothing and he doesn't need a chant. why is he getting weaker from just teleporting?
With his heart pounding and mind spinning in search of solutions, Lucius prepared to use Teleport again. The Juggernaut, unshakable and merciless, continued its relentless pursuit. With each teleport, Lucius barely managed to maintain a safe distance, his strength rapidly diminishing with each movement. - JSirMixalotL2mthCommented
They only wanted the 3 girls though...
Apollo and his alliance, on the other hand, weren't too bothered and were just overall excited with this new device that could revolutionize many industries, especially trade and travel, which would also mean unimaginable wealth. In any case, they would be able to get their hands on it and its origin once they won this game. All they needed to do is to wait and harvest this unexpected gain. - JSirMixalotL2mthReplied to Sigmarc
the library of ohara .com
Around mid-1497, if my memory serves me right, the Roger Pirates accomplished the "Great Voyage Adventure." They successfully reached Raftel (Laugh Tale) and earned the legendary title of "Pirate King"! - JSirMixalotL2mthReplied to
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Around mid-1497, if my memory serves me right, the Roger Pirates accomplished the "Great Voyage Adventure." They successfully reached Raftel (Laugh Tale) and earned the legendary title of "Pirate King"! - JSirMixalotL2mthCommented
Congratulations, not only did you get a debt of 1 million but also destroyed your future property and wasted a ton of your future money as well. But at least you got something new to brag about
"This is why I hate courts..." Lucius didn't like being condemned either, but he had to obey the rules established in the city. With the guild assuming responsibility for mediating the situation, it was revealed that both Lucius and the Apollo Family representatives faced an exorbitant debt of 1 million valis each. This revelation caused a shockwave among those present, as the amount was considerable even by the standards of relatively wealthy families. - JSirMixalotL2mthCommented
How surprising. No one could see that coming... Even a 12 year old would know that this guy would attack him. 99% of MCs lose their brain for dumb plot sakes that could easily be integrated with reason
As Lucius cast his magic against a group trying to attack him, someone faster than anyone Lucius had faced so far rushed towards him. The figure appeared at his side before the mage could react and threw him backward; it was Hyakinthos who had appeared and attacked Lucius unprepared, hitting him directly in the chest. - JSirMixalotL2mthCommented
why would a god call him lord?
"Lord Lucius, it's good to see you; you're famous now, from what I've heard." Takemikazuchi met him at the gate as I sounded the campaign. - JSirMixalotL2mthCommented
Quite dumb, with all the challenges he knows are coming he should spend some time in the dungeon at least until the war game
"Okay, I'll do it." In the end, he accepted this demand.