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Wary—>wariness Boys—>boy
Facade?
*repairs had to be made often.
*Emerged - immersed
*dignity - a lot of misspellings are “ie” rather than “y”
I would just remove the adjectives “strongest and latest” since they don’t really mean anything here. Plus there is the misspelling.
Using quotes “quotation marks” when a character is speaking is recommended.
*his baby
Why did you grammar like this!? :(
*than* or replace with “from”
He was quoting a poet. She identified the poet/source.
Daenerys was born during/after the rebellion as they fled the palace to Dragonstone. So this line makes no sense. Maybe change it to if anyone spoke ill of his family, Viserys would have skinned them. Since she was yet to be born. His character might blame her for his mother’s death so I don’t think there was ever any kindness she experienced.
You keep confusing the genders for this FEMALE Dryad.
*Her world
The narration here changes strangely. Wanda is alone waking up therefore saying” I was different” from Travis’s perspective does not make sense. Maybe change “I” to “Travis.”
Guesses -> Guests
That power “to” -> that power “too”
Not “tentacles” -> “antennae”