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It’s starting instead of it’s start
Change to your highness, majesty is referred to a king or queen , highness is for princes, princesses.
Princes and Princesses
Li Jinnian is in the navy and the equivalent rank to the army which is Lieutenant Colonel is Lieutenant Commander. Also what rank is Ye Jian? I remember at Grandpa Gen’s funeral she wore Captain epaulets. Also is Commander Xia chief of the army a 5 star general?
‘Out of fear’, not out of afraid.
Term instead of Teen
Contraption instead of contraction
Nobles*
I think the generic term of Magic Swordsman suits better than Spellblade. Or you could have a spin if that concept. Whatever suits you best.
*inform
Harem*
Couldn’t instead of could.
Portion not position and while not whole.
'She wasn't sick!'
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'Today was the 4th day of training, revising their plans, preparing their weapons and everything else needed for the upcoming battle.' I edited this paragraph for you. I believe that this sounds better. I also suggest using programs like Grammarly (not promoting) for editing.