feel like instead of saying returner, she should say ChongSe Ze, or something, which means returner in Chinese. Will add to the vibe. And then obviously the main character can be like? Returner? What does that mean.

great writing style.

Not bad so far, so I will continue reading. Added to my collection. My only thing is, some parts feel a bit too much of a tell, or the dialogue feels a bit too wordy in some parts.

I think u should split up ur dialogue a tad bit more.

Do not trust it?

You comment on your chapters so much.

Isn't this morse?

wow.

this is too many words for me.

what.

liked the pokemanz scene.

how we should all talk to our cousins.

where.

bull e, more like swol e.

real. I did robotics. it was pain.

yogue.

kinda cool.

This is what I aspire to me.

feels like something i would see out of a 2000's teen movie.

I think the chapter profiles are what's making the chapter seem long, but the chapter itself is not super long.