it's part of the character. if you remove it, it won't be the same.

it's not easy to talk like a cave man. first, you have to think like a cave man. I find the 'three word rule works best', you just use three word sentences for a day. once you have the mentality, it's much easier.

I don't mind the drag along characters, there were just too many in this section. one is ok. i actually think you should write a survival competition, and each competitor gets a famous companion.

Just give each clone a girl, they're practically their own person already. Then if you run out of Clones, just give him more. No need for the messy time to find time for each one, and no complaint about not giving attention by sending a clone. You've practically got the perfect setup already .

Now you can take over, Hydra.

Instead of harem or not, you have set up the perfect in-between. Every clone gets a girl, and the main body gets his own.

wanted, curved shotequilibrium, gun cata

it's a good read so far, the entire concept pulled me in. I'm willing to wait for a good read

is author ok?

I'm not understanding the situation, he wanted to be a good guy, now he's a murdering narcissist. cultivation doesn't usually cause mental health problems. in fact mental demons usually block the path of them. the change in mentality, if there is one is gradually introduced. I was enjoying the story the way it was, now I'm not sure

I think you should stick with his original plan, initially. he should gather a small group and travel. then he should come back to earth, only to find it in need of saving. his original prediction happened and the wizarding world has lost, and the muggle world has adopted runes, and is on the verge of destruction from national conflicts. he is of the opinion to let it happen, however his team (that he has come to care for) convinces him to do something to help.

next chapter please? ............................................................................................................................................