*Upi and emails

Dude why not create Patreon account instead of you and emails as some of us do not want to share those details with strangers.

Hyderabad lo port Enti ra..

Don’t write it as mc inner voice every time, use single quotes for thoughts and double for dialogues.

Ok, Copy Technique is possible because of Rika who saves the technique as to use different technique changes something in brain.

I am willing to pay dollars for the additional chapters but you should be have multiple tiers as I general go for basic tier unless chapters consistency and story is exordinary for example, Hard Enough Pokemon fanfic etc. Depending on the story progression and quality it will depend.

It is okay to use the pics but make to not use too many pics as well as that will make readers go to comments section too many times and also do describe the person etc. as that will help you practice the writing for future books.

So Sakuna type Harry… interesting …

*Improving

Writing is definitely impromptu chapter to chapter and it is good that you are taking valid criticism to improve your writing.

Good story . But I feel you are repeating few phrases multiple times. Especially regarding his experience, we get it he has experience in previous life don’t say it multiple time in the same chapter. And I am happy that you have plans till nba but first focus on high school and then you can see if you can integrate these players in nba or not.

Good fic. One thing I have to say is you use exclamations too much? It is ignorable but somewhat annoying.

One thing I have to say conversations fells kind of forced. You are good at explaining the scenes but the dialogues between scenes feel inorganic or kinda rushed.

Good story but one thing I say slow the pace man, I know you want to get to time skip but don’t fast track everything.

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This is superb book. Hope it will grow futher so that they make an anime out of it.........................................................................................................................................

Dude take rest, story can wait. Health is more important than this.

small correction it is not Lucifer....it is Lucilfer.

interesting concept but fix feels like u r giving highlights of his life not a story. U have go improve on that.

is it Water Breathing or u just named it same.