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Isn't this a little contradicting. I mean going by what you said couldn't Voldemort also do something similiar because he is heir Slytherin trought Gaunt line. You could argue that he wasn't the Head of the familiy, but what about other 4 founders descendants. Thats a little bit too much plot armor for me

Why Arthur tho, it is clearly stated that until Fudge started tripping ministry of magic wasn't involved in hogwarts business. How can arthur be his guide to magical then?

Here, have all my stones

You really need a proof reader or editor. Your thought process is good but grammaticaly your most of the sentences have some mistakes.

You can't look at it that way, I mean yea it's logical when you think of it, but the very concept of cultivation is illogical (I mean achiving immortality by sitting down pondering the mysteries of universe, wtf?). And also in like 90% of xuanhuan stories MC need an outside stimuli to breaktrought next realm. So basically cultivating for long period of time doesn't help. Thats why he needs to risk his life to stimulate growth. When you consider it, in canon, stages of genetic constraint are derived from cultivation in a way that they also need person to risk their life to stimulate progress. Now let's forget all I said and focus on what you said. I mean yea it's possible that he could reach that final realm in time. But at that point story isn't enjoyable anymore, he can beat anyone, there are no more struggles, no need for character development. Story could end right there.

So basically, GOD is f-ing him over for getting ballsy. Also nice little throwback about GOD being able to move time forwards but not backwards(I'm guessing thats what you meant, right? ). Cool stuff

Well thought out plot with just enough foreshadowing of future events. It keeps you on edge, wanting more. No gramatical mistakes also. All in all a great read, worth the time, hope you keep it up👍👍👍

I fricking love love love your story. It's very rare to find such a good ff on any of the sites. Great character building, very good grammar and the story just flows. Also love the little bits of showing that you are gonna go off canon. Kudos, keep up the good work!!!

It would be better if you said it was fanfiction so anything can go. Just saying you can't freaking judge it's design if you can't see the petals or whatever was engraved. I mean it's a stupid thing to argue about

Not truly big complaint, but it really broke immersion. How the hell you you engrave a needle!! It's a freaking metal pin, not a punch needle, it's even slimmer than matchstick cause of the mass conversion

One of the rare few good GOT crossovers (and regular ffs) I have read, and that's including fanfiction.net. No stupid gramatical mistakes, no retarded plot holes that make me want to rip my hair out. All in all great work, keep up man, you got it going for you. Kudos!!!