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I think it would be more accurate to say she has sub-quirks. In the series you can see this with a lot of people. All Might has super human abilities, but his OFA also gives h transformation abilities. Bakugo has resistance to various effects that can be produced by explosions, but that's not his quirk. There are a lot more examples, but you get the idea.
I agree, seperate your paragraphs. You should end a paragraph on scene changes and topic switches to make your story easier to read. This is more down to your writing style, but I think you should seperate dialogue from everything else. Even when someone is skimming through your story they can easily figure out what's happening without having to read blocks of text (helpful for editing too) based on the context of the conversations between characters.
Where did you hear this? I'm almost 100% sure she is just old.
out of nowhere*
This comment made me laugh.
I included the point about checking if the baby is okay because this method was used in the past to test if the baby was responsive. If it didn't respond to getting slapped it would usually mean something is wrong with the baby, which can be anything from damaged nerves, messed up brain, death, etc.
Why do authors always write the baby getting slapped after birth? No one actually does this in modern day. 1. Can be seen as abuse by the mother/father who are in physical and emotional pain, and quite hysterical at times. 2. This is set in modern day. They can easily check if the baby is dying, even without fancy machines. 3. Why would you want to make a baby cry? They are so annoying and now you have to listen to a baby cry for and iit's our fault.
this was unexpected
why do you keep calling him quirkless when it's from the villains POV? To an outsider he obviously has some sort of quirk.
How would they know he's a robber if he's dead?
That's fair. I just think it's been awhile since then and he's experienced a lot with them, so he should know at least a small amount what they think about him.
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Don't do a timeskip if you're going to immediately do a flashback.