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Give him the original name of the shadow monarch, Ashborn
A piece of advice, reread the chapter, the dialogues seem a bit forced, people (especially in a position of power) are reluctant to believe that they don't have control of the situation, the dialogue (in my opinion) lacks a bit of contrast between the parties and raiden should express himself in a more confident and decisive way, he has the will of gaia on his side and that of all the heroes and some have an enormous arrogance and a political experience that would make anyone pale, in conclusion, we should also take into account the heroes with whom interacted and advised him throughout the story to express his character and attitude. This is my opinion, I hope it can be useful to you, otherwise I really like your story, keep it up. translated with google translate
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I like it, more please.