It reads like a chinese novel, fights a 5 year old so they 7 year old wants to fight him, beats him so the grandfather is agressive with him. Why turn naruto into another low quality chinese novel. Also the PACE IS TOO DAMN SLOW, everytime the MC says something out loud he then need a paragraph of internal dialogue for some reason. Massive blocks of the chapters that are pointless. Chapters could be half of big, still have the same detail and still be slow paced. Its annoying to read.

so boring, its like a wikipedia page. You not need a paragraph of internal thought after every sentence said out loud.

Aah yeah the kids sound exactly like the people from the auction house, they're meant to be kids ffs.

Stupid boring cliche dialogue. Who ever talks like that, they talk like extremely dull robots with the mentality of 8 year old children and they're all meant to be decades old demon slaying soldiers.

A hidden expert, except he's a 5 year old kid ffs.

It reads so weird. Doesnt sound like any of the characters at all. It reads like a wikipedia page.

Interesting in the beginning, but the authors quality just declines, so many plot holes, MC personality is all over the place. The side characters and old 'strong' characters are honestly stupid. He gets betrayed by the academy? He's literally the strongest student in hundreds of years, completes the tower, is shown to be amazingly strong and yet they just throw him away and try to kill him? WHAT? They literally want strong students to help the dark faction and yet when they have one they don't prioritie him at all? Like he'd be the first thing you try and secure when the actions attacked, but he's just forgotten about and even is attacked by that same faction. Im so confused about that entire situation. What a stupid and badly written arc, i've never seen a story fall down in quality so much so fast.

How did you manage to make the pokemon world into some type of generic cultivation novel. 'Talent' come on really.

Pace is so slow Im going to fall asleep. So much detail and background about characters that will be forgotten when he actually cultivates. Speaking of cultivation? where? he's learning all this boring stuff, stuck at this boring moral city, doing literally nothing but 'training' moral stuff. Im honestly to the point where I skip entire chapters.

Wow such a mystery a powerul mage helping a family whose powerful mage has not appeared yet. Why are you writing like a 5 year old and making literally everyone an idiot.

Why doesnt he just spend points on a big nuke of a skill instead of all these meh skills. Firebolt weak machine gun, multi firebolt weak machine gun still, fire atro turret weak machine gun... Guy has infinite mana, just get a small nuke and spam it.

What poor writing, its like readin a wikipedia page. Every generic villian character comes with their own paragraph, if only I didn't forget them instantly... I'll give it a few more chapters and drop it I guess.

Nothing has happened yet he keeps getting stronger for literally no reason. Its so boring, why even have the system. Ruined the story.

Cool background, revenge, restored body. Cool. Stupid system... what a shame. Ruined the story, getting 'characters' makes the world feel hollow, having a bunch of stuff given to him is pointless. Guy struggled to become OP yet now you've mary sued him its making him boring.

Grow up. Its pathetic.

10 chapters in and the numbers already slipping. 15 minutes for what? Shaved 20% of the hp instantly.

I'll give context, the way its written it bad english. The tenses are all over the place and it doesnt flow well.

Pointless? all that baffle for what just to kill him anyway? Why did she say yes? Should could of just had an anbu go and off him. Why risk so much? Why panic the village, why trick her own ninja, why risk the villages nine tails.

Literal children flirting? Bro.

Kingdom building is boring to read. May as well go read a wiki page.