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DevonP

DevonP

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2018-04-09 JoinedIndonesia
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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Commented

    uh.. rhein and mizari? you mean Rain and Misery? you should read the wiki of your fanfic verse when writing bro..

    Ch 5 CH. 5: Prophicized Encounter
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    Anime is an Outer God's Playground
    Anime & Comics · LXVE_MuRdxR69
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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Posted

    read this at your own risk............................................................ aianaizniajsiwksisqjxiaoqlwnflpckxqnqjjxndjskxkidxkakqnzjxiqjnsksoslxmwkqosokdkdoskwskosskwmkskdkdkwkskxkoxksksksoskskkskxksnsjkssmmdksks

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    Super Dimensional Guild
    Anime & Comics · Takamiya_Shin
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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Replied to Morg535

    you're right, unfortunately.

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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Posted

    interesting novel, with revenge mc as the core. however, each chapter has many case of pronoun mistakes and incomprehensible sentences. honestly did not deserve it's 4.5 star ratings, but good enough to read to past time if you're not a grammar police like me.

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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Commented

    is it only me who noticed that the author mentions servants as minions? 😵

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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Commented

    interesting story, but you really need an editor or proofreader, to minimize mistakes before updating your story. in this chapter i see spikes in mistakes compared to the previous ones. anyway, good job and keep getting better!

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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Commented

    hmm.. shouldn't monkey King be in Chinese myology? he is one of Jade emperor's heavenly general right? why did he become Indra's lackey? did you confuse Chinese mythology and Indian's?

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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Commented

    reading until this chapter, i realize this novel is just a poorly edited mtl -_-

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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Commented

    really need to be edited before uploading, as it is clear that mistakes often appears and consistency left much to be desired i hope this will get better since the premise is interesting i mean, why be a normie pirate when you can be a filthy rich celestial dragon instead?

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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Commented

    only one word i can say is: MOAARRR😝

    Ch 10 Ah... We meet again
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    Genshin Impact: The Template System
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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Commented

    i thought i read that this novel is not patreon locked on the first chapter... 🙄

    Ch 34 THIS FANFIC WILL ONLY BE POSTED ON MY PA TREON JUST $7 TO JOIN AND READ 40 R-18 ADVANCED CHAPTERS and $10 you can vote for harem girls and commission R-18 chapters! [Lowest tier is just $7] ********&
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    Reborn in Genshin Impact with System
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  • DevonP
    DevonP1yr
    Commented

    i don't mean to sound rude but you really need to better your grammar and punctuation. You could write on ms word first before uploading it here since it has built in checker for grammar and wrong words. It's not perfect, but good enough to mend small problems. Otherwise, the story and premise are quite interesting, but the mistakes really drag this novel down. I hope the subsequent chapters will be better as I am personally very interested in this story. Keep up the good work and keep getting better 😁😁😁

    Ch 7 CHAPTER 8 A New Down
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    Forging Empires and the Utopia
    Anime & Comics · GodOfGreedAs
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