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thanks for the chapter!i'll give some opinions/thoughts (that you really dont have to take into consideration, its already good enough!). i'm really enjoying the dynamics here, though i'm getting concerned that it all moves to fast, but hey, its still great!i like shiori, though i'm not sure if there is enough reason for a heartless naruto xD i hoje kakashi can do something about that. (i am not saying i would like to see a kind naruto either).I understand Shiori wanting to make a lot of things since she is getting rich, but from my perspective, would everyone just want to follow a kid on big investments? Did she show proof of being able to handle money and investments?well, does this all manter at all? not at all, I just think sometimes Some decisions seem too easelly done and maybe a paragraph or a chapter trying to explain Some plans better would captivate more readers .keep up with the good work, will keep reading regardless, you good me hooked either way 😁
You don't have to apologize. I read this at night and wrote a comment without thinking much xD If this is your stile you should keep it. I personally dislike too much descriptions of relationships and emotions between characters even more when in the middle of an action scene. But I don't see anyone else complaining (even tho I don't read the comments much) so maybe you have an audience that likes that stuff. I also see people that liked and did see coming what I saw as predictable, so maybe I'm just to good at predicting (jk xD). I'm just saying don't mind me if I'm the only one and work (obviously) for your larger audience ;) keep up with your good work!
I've commented the last chapter and I guess I should comment this one too. Short chapters are OK. But only if they actually mean anything. I'm feeling that I'm just throwing my money away on this novel, sorry author, I liked the idea of this work, but it is very badly planned (talking about the plots now but also about chapter planning). Also I still abide by my previous chapter comment after this chapter.
This is becoming more and more predictable... I'm against jayden dying but (I won't complain about the MC) will every character have plot armor all the way? It would actually make sense if jayden died there, the mission was stupid and there was no rush to save Abby since she was home and apparently well taken care off. This mission and it's results are very predictable to say the least. And also, this series have 200 and some chapters, but how come this battle and a rescue mission so quick have taken almost 30 chaps and it's still not over... There is so much more that can be explored, but each chapter has 50% of its words just justifying their actions... And this makes things (on one side) more predictable and on the other, more boring. I find myself scrolling long texts talking about relationships and why they trust each other and how much.... Just why write this? Show it with actions! Don't waist chapters on useless (and some times cringe) content... This is getting more and more childish so I might drop this on the next chapters. Sorry for anything, and Goodby.