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Christmas and Vatican are unreleated. Its like saying 1+1 = 1. Christmas is a commercialized holiday with roots in paganism, judaism and other religions as a winter solstice celebration. Christianity being one of those religions.
I thought his plan was to not become popular or to stand out to much?
Britain’s Auror Academy??? Isnt the whole purpose of going through the school to meet the qualifications to join the Aurors? The apprenticeship i understand, but a seperate vocational school???
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The Harem Stamp
Contradicts was the wrong word to use. Loose ends is better. The character plans to do all these things but then there is a tangent and they are never mentioned again. Like DNA and the teacher, Warding class now warding book, etc. Plenty of things the main character plans for but are forgotten a few chapters later.
I have have a critique. The author continues to expound on Raven’s amazingness when he/she/they want to illustrate he has improved in one area of his cultivation or just to reiterate that progress. If possible I’d like to see some diversity of themes when it comes to Raven utilizing his abilities. Not just bragging but maybe just a simple “Raven makes it to the mountain utilizing the improved space-time laws.” Obviously the author will write it better but i hope i made my point.