Look sure on average women might have less arm strength, but mate if your using that sweeping generalisation, using gender as a means of degredation. Then yes thats sexist. Just go up to your female friends and ask is saying “you hit like a girl sexist?”

A good book in the making, a street urchin theif who can hear the spirits of the dead or other foul and fair entities sounds fantastic. So if you ever wish to continue this story in some form, I’d love read it.

Out of all the potential beginnings a novel can have my favourite is the street urchin theif. Not to mention the idea of a medium/seer theif is quite compelling. Although personally I’d say such a story would be better as a more traditional less game oriented story, that’s more personal preference. Making her sound intelligent does come across, although it is a little forced. It might be a bit more engaging if she was overly polite/formal or perhaps spoke with a more childish accent and manner despite her clever wit. Regardless I think its a good book in the making and I’d love to give it a read if you decide to continue it again some day.

*Sight rather than site

Actually ignore me I’m talk out of my ass

I mean a need to please his new benefactor could do the trick to a degree, but even thats a but lacking. I mean he doesnt even understand magic yet not to mention this academy

I’m sort of confused as to why he wants to “reach the top”. I mean is it because of the fairytales he read? Even then thats surely more about being skilled and heroic than being the head of this magick order. I dunno I just feel like he hasn’t really got any motivation beyond being free of servitued and doing Molly proud. Certainly nothing like a dire need or perhaps a deep fasination with magic that would spurr him onward to make such a conviction.

Just had a uni class on earth water systems, so it should be right. But if I’m missing something let me know. 😁

Rivers don’t (to my knowledge) ever flow from the sea. There’s an interchange of water of course, but the flow direction is from high to low and the ocean is the lowest point of the coast. So it’d be fine for the crops (for a bunch of reasons, after all the nile floodplains are some of the richest soil in the world and are right next to the sea; relatively), but believe me thats not what’s mainly feeding an inland lake.

Yeah, this immediately reminded me of my first time galloping I totally freaked 🤣

Yo I’m quiet enjoying this novel, but those last two chps made me sad. Each to thier own, but I would have much preferred to experience the world Cypher is in first hand. His relationships, trials and tribulations rather than just being told about them. Its just a bunch of exposition I could have learned over time, rather than a summary of his life so far. Anyway its just some thoughts for if you ever republish. Still liking it and I think you’ve got a gem of a novel 😁

All good mate 😁

Hmmmmmmmmmmmmm 354 incarnations and hes ***ist. Seems unlikely.

And yes I know they’re in a cave but the use of the word canopy is really throwing me off. Canopy doesn’t mean ceiling mate.

Yo author. I’m enjoying your novel, but what on earth does this sentence mean? Are you saying they’re squeezing through gaps in the tunnel or are they slipping through a really dense forest/jungle that has formed a tunnel with the trunks and canopy?

How does he know about novels?

Life’s a piece of shit, when you look at it... 😉

Ok books over nothing to see here

Love it 😎

Hold fast sisters! We shall prevail! FOR THE COLONY!