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AdmiralAlcon3mthCommentedCh 1 Tides Rising- AdmiralAlcon2yrCommentedCh 59 51.1 First Meeting
- AdmiralAlcon2yrCommentedCh 50 Confrontation
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Ye, it's mostly about the release rate. On this site most people are for the day to day read - as in an update 1/2 days apart from the last. Adding to the fact that the plot is somewhat slow it costs You the intrest in the novel. Now fot the story: the only point so far is the marriage - for me personally, the forced marriage is fine, but some people are fed up with the eastern style fics and that move on Your part probably is too similar to that kind of writing. The rest of the story is very good, if only a little slow. ;) I will still read Your work and give You power stones cuz I think this fic is one of the best I have read so far. So keep up the good work and do not mind the trolls and stuff like that.
Ch 48 Home Sweet Home Part 2 - AdmiralAlcon3yrCommented
"sat" not "hat"?
Cross hat down and crossed his legs. A woman said "Please describe the attack." Cross coughed and said "Mr. Potter was being attacked by a Dementor, unwilling to die he used a Patronus Charm to send it away. Afterwards he saw a poor muggle boy being fed on by another Dementor and graciously saved his life." - AdmiralAlcon3yrReplied to _MASTER_
Yes he didn't know, but he spoke to the snake already.
Bogrod nodded and went to work the cart. Cross smiled at Harry and waved as they sped away. Harry looked in Cross' direction in doubt, Hagrid looked at him and said "What's wrong?" Harry said "That boy was very strange, he can speak a different language just like me!" - AdmiralAlcon3yrReplied to Scythe02
It's a fanfic... and what if that the pureblood ideas came with brit wizards coming to America? You don't know that in a fanfiction.
Her statue as a 'half-blood', along with her assailant's as a rich 'pure-blood' didn't help her case, as there was no place for the truth in a world that still believed in absurd notions such as Blood Purity. Karl Greengrass ensured her freedom, as long as she agreed to work on the team, which she did. - AdmiralAlcon3yrCommented
"But" should be "both" right? Love your work btw, keep it up man!
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