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Liking the story so far but I really think you need to do something about how Miles and Coin are approaching things here. They could die, they have seen others die. They realize this but instead of utilizing the available resources they are doing nothing but constantly throwing themselves into danger. Miles could use the mind serum but is avoiding getting it for no discernible reason even thought it would likely increase his chances of survival. They are stockpiling money with no goal in mind instead of buying equipment/orbs that could save their lives. You have portrayed Miles as being relatively smart, and Coin is a fricken AI who has a primary directive of keeping Miles alive. Why are neither of them taking it seriously?
Thanks for the chapter. You are asking for comments so here is mine. You are basically writing duplicate that offer no additional information. By the first Yuan Meng POV chapter where she was back at school we already knew that people didn't recognize her and that there was an increased level of carnal interest in her. I don't feel anything was added by effectively repeating these facts 3 (+?) times. Otherwise I am enjoying your story but it feels slow due to the above being done regularly.
This is just frustrating to read. First, all of the character names are mismatches of someone google searching "top 20 American first names" and "top 20 American last names". It is super frustrating to read when every single character has a name that I would expect to see as a place holder on a police report involving minors. Second is that it absurdly draws out conflicts. It is a constant seesaw between the MC getting harassed and then getting some form of minor revenge. There is also an absurd focus on side characters, even their POVs, considering we can be sure they aren't going to play any major role outside of the current conflict they are involved in with the MC. Speaking of conflict, this is another majorly frustrating aspect. The MC is described as a hardworking, kind, and loyal man. The entire novel is just him being defecated on repeatedly.
It is almost cliche in a way but might makes right. It doesn't matter whether she has the moral high ground or not. She is stronger so she can enforce her will. It is clear that Eve is just trying to take advantage of the situation to gain benefits, but it does not appear that she was the one who made the situation. The real question is will the god/goddess who resurrected Styx standby and let Eve do what she wants? I can't wait to see what happens!
I wrote that comment when I read that chapter. I have since caught up on the story and you basically resolved the issue as of where the story is right now and it didn't take hundreds of chapters like it does in other novels. The trope is frustrating because it makes the one thing a character almost always has control over, their mind/thoughts, and strips that from them. This can be useful when used as a plot device to further a specific goal but when it is a persistent facet of a story it can become extremely annoying. I am quite happy with how you dealt with it and that as mentioned you didn't take hundreds of chapters to do so.
Honestly they say bro and mate way too often. Seems like every sentence has to have it somewhere and it makes me feel like I am listening to two stoned out surfers. Also not sure why Yarden would want to share his alone time with the women hes set his eyes on with someone else.
There are thousands of novels on this site. Most people are going to give their votes to chapters that have stated benefits for doing so (IE more chapters). You didn't have any milestones stated so there was no point to vote because my vote might not matter here where it could elsewhere. I greatly enjoy your novel so far and I am looking forward to further chapters, I am sorry that my previous comment implied otherwise. My intent was to point out that you should state what milestones you will have for votes. Without stating it you could arbitrarily set it after the fact. If it is in writing then it is more real as a goal. Most authors put these either in the summary or in the 'Creator's Thoughts'. At the time of writing you had it in neither.
I still don't understand the torture. I mean I get the training aspect but it makes no sense for Oliver to allow it to happen. Not only did William not agree to it, if William is fated to choose one of the sisters (prophecies suck by the way) then why would he ever choose the one who tortured him for days? Why would Oliver allow this to happen if he wants Celine to be chosen? Doubly so since they tortured Ella. I can't think of a better way to make someone who wants to kill you because you tortured them for days want to kill you more than by doing the same thing to their mama. Once again, it makes no sense.