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  • Free20play
    Free20play8d
    Replied to Best_Human_Evil

    amon and klein aren’t really angels though. adam somewhat makes sense as an angel since one of his beyonder pathways literally has angel/sun/light theme going on. amon would be an eldritch worm/bug. klein would be some strange puppet/mass of nondescript worms controlled by strings.

    Ch 17 Vasco Strada
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    DxD: A Heretical Nun
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  • Free20play
    Free20play12d
    Commented

    hope sirzechs doesn’t die otherwise someone else will have to be the maou.

    Ch 28 Come to your senses, Sirzechs
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    Life in DxD After Becoming a Legend
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  • Free20play
    Free20play17d
    Replied to Anonny_Anonymous

    hes dumb also flying thunder god isn’t absolute but overrated tbh. naruto is so fast he can react to it in the later arcs let alone all the villains who seem to be so fast space time teleportations useless against them.

    Ch 64 Chapter 64
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    Naruto: An Uchiha With A Superpower Roulette
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  • Free20play
    Free20play21d
    Replied to Daoist_KittyKat

    author he is right. pruning of timelines is just bad writing really. it works in nasuverse since nasu is a hack and the entire setting is held up together by duct tape. its okay to admit you are wrong sometimes author. honestly is there EVEN an equivalent to gaiya/alaya expie in DxD? and know great red and ophis don’t count since they are dragons who only truly care for themselves. the god of the bible in dxd also doesn’t seem to count much either since he got whacked off early. really unless you are creating oc expies for them but yeah that’d just seems ultra convoluted.

    Ch 18 Chapter 18 - You Dare Question Me?! You Imprudent Devil Who Does Not Recognise Mount Tai!
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    I am secretly a 12th Dimensional Eldritch God
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  • Free20play
    Free20play21d
    Replied to Daoist_KittyKat

    thats nasuverse earth for sure. but not all realities function like that. dxd doesn’t have pruned timelines or what not as an example author. and honestly the nasuverse excuse never really held up at all. even in the worlds where humans succeeds and makes it to the stars it seems they still never get accepted by gaia/alaya at all. its perhaps one of the dumbest gimmicks in fictional verses that doesn’t even follow its own rules. basically nasu is just a lazy hack.

    Ch 18 Chapter 18 - You Dare Question Me?! You Imprudent Devil Who Does Not Recognise Mount Tai!
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    I am secretly a 12th Dimensional Eldritch God
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  • Free20play
    Free20play25d
    Commented

    its okay but why go through all that trouble of helping out phenex? just seems ultra convoluted and i’ll be honest the quality of this chapter was kinda weak compared to the previous ones.

    Ch 18 Chapter 18 - You Dare Question Me?! You Imprudent Devil Who Does Not Recognise Mount Tai!
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    I am secretly a 12th Dimensional Eldritch God
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  • Free20play
    Free20play26d
    Replied to Free20play

    azure you following me across fanfics or something?

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    Danmachi - Eldritch Apostle
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  • Free20play
    Free20play26d
    Replied to Free20play

    i just realized i was confusing this fanfic with another fanfic lol. ignore part of my comment about mc being chuuni.

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    Danmachi - Eldritch Apostle
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  • Free20play
    Free20play26d
    Replied to AzureFluteFan2

    you haven’t read enough fiction then. there are animes,web novels,ln novels,vns,mangas,manhas in which characters have sentient swords that can turn into human companions. now try to be abit creative and imagine a magical slash sorcerer slash wizard slash warlock take on what that would even be. i’m sorry my friend but i feel like you aren’t that much of a fanatic.(no lifer) anyways getting back on topic a good author can make or break a story themselves doing anything. one shouldn’t let bad authors be a definitive guide on what not to do or what to do. as the idea of a sentient non human/tool object companion is an incredibly commonplace trope in fiction in particular fantasy fiction both scifi to general fantasy. as for them gaining a human form or anthropomorphic form which is generally what happens anyways as most of the time there’ll always be some remnant in either their physical appearance or behavior that clues in the readers on their true nature. i get why you are frustrated as there have been way too many bad fanfic authors who don’t understand how to write such characters or any characters at all or understand pacing or even have a modicum of grammar skills. anyways the reason i brought up demonbane is i can’t imagine someone being a true anime/manga/vn and light novel degenerate not atleast having once played that game or heard it once. and clearly the mc is a chuuni so with him copying a reality marble from fate it won’t be too long before the mc tries doing a jotaro “yare yare daze” or cid kagenou “i am atomic” scenario so since mc is in a fantasy world based off magic i assumed at some point he’d try his hand on creating sentient nonhuman allies. say such as golems or magical spirits,homunculus,etc. since frieren has grimoires i thought taking a page from demonbane would’ve fit well with the story. in particular because of how absurd it’d seem to the denizens of frierens universe. i’d like to explain in more detail. one demonbane grimioires can fuse with their holder/host like a kamen rider/power ranger suit giving them a cool stylish form alongside new powers&abilities. by themselves demonbane grimoires are mostly powerless/defenseless and function more like mascots. they aren’t all knowledgeable emotionless husks and can be depressed and betray/not help their holder/host if they are treated badly. anyways i just thought it’d be ultra cool to see mc try his hand on recreating a demonbane grimoire. imagine a necronomicon that turns into a loli that can power you up and helps you fight cthulhu and friends that and one of the strongest mechas in all of fiction. while i like super ttgl its not nearly as strong as either eldergod demonbane,getter emperor,mazinger zero,or the scp mecha the broken god/mehkane from the scp foundation(the very definition of bad writing).

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    Danmachi - Eldritch Apostle
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  • Free20play
    Free20play26d
    Replied to AzureFluteFan2

    its not that out of place in fantasy though. grimoires turning into people. dolls,automatons gaining free will. cursed tools becoming sentient. just look at full metal alchemist the big bad was basically an artificial lifeform that lived in a glass flask. goetia from fate grand order was basically the same too. if anything its a super common trope. what i think you hate is when say a bad fanfic author creates a system then has it turn into a loli/little sister or harem member with no little to no characterization. again anything can be done well as long as the author puts in effort. this also is problematic since technically magical summons like say golems could easily be given sentience and turned into humans in any fantasy setting. and thats just one take. lets say mc creates some fire spirit to help him out and then later on down the line it ends up with a hot chick form? really i think you just hate bad writing done with this trope.

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    Danmachi - Eldritch Apostle
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  • Free20play
    Free20play1mth
    Replied to After_Wing

    also it wasn’t so much the show had potential to expand nasuverse lore. like i said before nasu seems to want to force his hand into every adaptation or parody related to his setting even when it makes no sense. prisma illya was him over stepping his reaches with a show that was primarily ecchi and meant for lolli lovers. i actually watched alot of prisma illya and had some doujins,artwork,and merchandise from the show purchased. so i’m still salty from nasu ruining prisma illya. i just get really angry on an emotional level seeing prisma illya tainted with mainline nasuverse nonsense. imagine if you had a semiofficial ecchi spinoff of dbz loosely related and akira toriyama tried to force it into the mainline universe even when its illogical and force lore-nonsense that made no sense down your throat thats basically what unfortunately happened to prisma illya.

    Ch 5 Simulated... Combat (Not)
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    Fate/Fisted
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  • Free20play
    Free20play1mth
    Replied to After_Wing

    oh i’m aware of this but prisma ilya becoming a serious adaptation was just nasu inserting his fingers where he shouldn’t have often times taking a successful nasuverse spinoff and trying to force into into the mainline universe this more or less killed prisma illyas popularity from what i remember during that time. basically imagine attack on titan or tokyo ghoul becoming a rom com shoujo slice of life suddenly. thats basically what happened near the later episodes of prisma illya. i remember there were lots of complaints of how the show felt like it changed entirely into a different product. the thing is i have no complaint against serious prisma ilya it just feels really out of place compared to regular nasuverse. this wasn’t the first time where nasu took some successful parody adaptation he didn’t really have a hand in and tried to steal it for himself. prisma illya was just the most egregious and blatant example out of them all. thats why i like it when authors are fans of the settings of the fanfics they r writing about so they don’t make basic mistakes like adding in prisma illya as servants in a serious nasuverse fanfic. personally i could see it working in a really parody-ish nasu fanfic where you aren’t meant to take it seriously. honestly as ecchi as prisma ilya was it was a good show but it becoming serious made no sense at all. nasu has a bad habit of trying to force things together that don’t work. maybe he just gets jealous when someone else is successful with his ip so maybe this was his way of getting revenge? who knows really? anyways prisma illya will always be out of place in the mainline nasuverse regardless of how much nasu tries to force it.

    Ch 5 Simulated... Combat (Not)
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    Fate/Fisted
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  • Free20play
    Free20play1mth
    Replied to Rtanj

    is mc actually emotionless? because he seems to still get angry frustrated at higher level adventurers bullying him just right after he himself bullies a pallum supporter. seems both hypocritical of him and not in line with what emotionless means. i honestly don’t think the emotionless gimmick is any good for a story but whatever.

    Ch 13 Solo I Guess
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  • Free20play
    Free20play1mth
    Commented

    please do not make the mc do a binding vow. they are almost always suck and the drawback aint worth it. binding vows are used by the weak. the truly strong have no need for binding vows. with only very rare specific exceptions like mechamaru where it makes sense and even then living as a crippled disabled person isn’t living at all.

    Ch 13 Training...
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    Jujutsu Kaisen: Game Changer
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  • Free20play
    Free20play1mth
    Commented

    author its not really necessary truth be told. the only strange part was mc becoming a human and the wish system. honestly the mc randomly pushing plot forward by acting like a fake demon lord wasn’t needed but its too early to tell. its your story tbh. but yeah this reminds me of that bleach/fgo fanfic where the mc was a sternritter oc with almighty and all schrifts. it started off good but became terrible when author forced mc to act edgy and villainous randomly near end of the first singularity or was it second then came all the random bleach espies and hollows randomly popping up in singularities and author dropped his story shortly thereafter. the thing is your story ISN’t even half that cringe or terrible YET. trust me when i say i’ve seen far far worst stories. right now my biggest caveat was the huge time skip followed with the wish system chapter that i felt was un-necessary. honestly having the mc change his race THAT early on is not as big of a deal as some readers here think. its strange and weird but it could be worst. as for how the mc is acting like a fake demon lord honestly Idk its only been 2 what 3 chapters? i think instead of a rewrite author you should get some good editor who can reign you in and give sound advice. or take a break if needed honestly writing takes creativity&most importantly Willpower! i remember reading a comment from a prolific author on question@ble questing forum; that authors who do rewrites are more likely to drop a story&stagnate and finally give up then authors who just push through.

    Ch 15 Announcement
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    Transmigrated into the World of Frieren
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  • Free20play
    Free20play1mth
    Replied to God_Is_Blind

    i will admit that i was more concerned on the mcs desire to go back to his old life and how sudden and un-needed this wishing system is. i actually didn’t even notice mc had a race change.(assuming that nothing changes after this chapter) i do feel it should at best be temporary and mcs race should change back to being a demon at some point soon otherwise the quality of this story will degrade. BUuuuuuut you guys are overreacting. yes this is kinda out of place buuut “Let the author cook”. the only thing i’m worried about is the wish system and if mc personality will be some goody two shoes one. because this race change to human is a bad sign. the thing is at most this is a quality degrade and many interesting interactions of a powerful demon ally of frieren disappears. i’m also disappointed the author is taking the easy way out of rushing stuff personally but thats just me. but again we can’t really criticize til enough has been written down. remember again this is a fanfic so don’t go expecting the quality of writing of an actual book. let the author cook.

    Ch 11 Chapter 11: Cooldown
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    Transmigrated into the World of Frieren
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  • Free20play
    Free20play1mth
    Replied to Zhang_Kai_Rui

    i agree too hopefully this is temporarily. what i’m far more concerned about is the system.

    Ch 11 Chapter 11: Cooldown
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  • Free20play
    Free20play1mth
    Commented

    author please ignore all the ignorant comments here. thank you for the food!

    Ch 11 Chapter 11: Cooldown
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    Transmigrated into the World of Frieren
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  • Free20play
    Free20play1mth
    Replied to God_Is_Blind

    can you please shut the f@-@ck up and let the author cook. this is hardly the worst trope i’ve seen. almost every isekai victim has an initial desire to go back to their old world.(its also only been a year or something since the mcs transmigration) you can see this in re:zero,overlord,konosuba and so on. its a classic trope and the fact this is what turns you off and NOT the fact mc has a limited omnipotent wishes system is what boggles my mind.that to me is the questionable part and hopefuly author is careful perhaps have the wishes cooldown increase in length with each use depending on what is specifically wished for with 9-10 years being the base and make it so thats only for each individual wish so mc needs 45-50 min years to gain the 5 total wishes back. also have the mc foolishly waste a wish trope could also come into play. really there are alot of ways the 5 wishes could be used. narratively as long as its interesting. anyways lets wait and see what the author cooks. this story so far is decent&close enough in quality to “orario records of a cheating b@stard”.

    Ch 11 Chapter 11: Cooldown
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    Transmigrated into the World of Frieren
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  • Free20play
    Free20play1mth
    Commented

    rinnegan and otsuksuki bloodline is alot more powerful then gojos six eyes. as mc has basically countless abilities he could make up that could destroy gojo theoretically. not even counting all the random jutsus that exist in naruto verse that could be carried over into jjk.

    Ch 20 Ch 20: Shoko's Birthday Part 3 [Bonus]
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    Jujutsu Kaisen: I have Rinne-Sharingan
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