Op protagonists are the best
So is he leaving or what? The mc is saying one thing and doing something different. This was only in the first few chaps, is this tory gonna continue with this kind of thing? Where the mc plays as a humbug?
Stop changing from 3rd to 1st person ffs 🤦🏽♂️
I’m crying 😭
Hes said ‘enough playing’ multiple times already, so why is the fight not over? This fight is a joke and the story gotta be one too
That would mean altering the whole story. Butterfly affect
A soldier that doesn’t kill. makes sense
Makes density shifting his weak trait but still names him ghost, the creature known for phasing through walls.
So why would he not stay home? His first thought is to go to school when he has no idea what is going on? For what? To face slap people and get into misunderstandings? I can see where this story is going, mc most likely no intelligence at all this story just pure wish fullfillment.
So is this mc going after toph or no, and think carefully, being 16 is completely taking advantage. Even if you wait till 18, that’s literally grooming. And none of that “it’s different world” bs. That’a just disgusting
So you set the main character as 16, when you already mentioned Toph as your favorite love interest.. I have no interest reading in a pedos work if this is what it is
The cover is very similar to the perverted serial killer that possessed a child, in the movie ‘prodigy’.
“I’m going to have a little fun” proceeds to chuck the most common sense out the window almost ruining the whole story
And you made him out to be a member of a surviving race with only 10 or so members. Where is his self preservation? No where. If all members had his perseveration abilities in keeping their secrets hidden from the public, they should’ve just died off tbh.
Honestly stories like these just make me depressed and closer to the point of dropping. You keep putting the mc down but nothing good has happened so far. Keep doing this too much and there is just no point in reading
I take back what I said author, seems like you know that it has been frustrating for us readers loss after loss ig