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Thank you for the reply. You are looking at what I stated and responded from a superficial point. I ofcourse understand that there is reason to what you did. What I was criticising was the method you used to reach whatever plot point you want to achieve in the future . Longterm villains need to have charisma and a purpose that readers can relate to in order for them to appreciate the villain re-occuring. This Bloodnorne villian is 2D with no background even or insite on his thoughts. What's done is done. I am just hoping you can take some value from the point I am trying to convey to how to properly flesh out a character that you are inserting to have a bigger role in the story. Rather than seeking like cookie cutter bad guy stereotype villains!

Great job author, glad Mathew is dead. Reoccurring forced villains are boring. I just slipped to the end of chapter to see if he died or not!

I hate when authors try to force a villain. Sorry but Evervlood is too forced and unrealistic. Yes you explained how this and that led to the outcome but that doesn't detract from how unrealistic it feels. The villain feels too one dimensional,you're telling of all the things that happened to him and all the potential enemies and fellow demons he met, this guy decides to obsess over MC without a proper background and character development? If he already recovered and has the means to increase his power, clearly the initial "set back" he had due to the MC isn't that huge of a deal. The story do far is decently written and fleshed out so it's frustrating when you go the lazy way and force a villain, lets not even talk about Mathew. Barely seen him in the story snd already made to be a headache type villian..

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