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Feels like a child whose first language is not English wrote this
Yeah but endurance is easy to increase
Dropped No person with normal iq gives that much money to a random person on the street without any proof There was no need to make your main character and the “wise advisor” this dumb to move the plot Good luck with your story Final rating 1.5/5
No Unless he fightswith pro fight rules
Jake flexing on her😂
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Above average story With the potential to be really good one But the author is not good enough right now Maybe if they were more mature then this story would have been a lot different The story screams “EMO” The author wanted it to be filled with plot twists and epic moments And they got lost in that The best parts of the story were the interactions between the characters but the author didn’t realize that focused too much on the “scehemes/fate/plans” bs and fkd it A simpler story would have been better Also the mc doesn’t make any progress as a character My advice will be to make it simpler Remove the awful attempts to make it a “masterpiece filled with schemes” and focus on the other parts
Who dis?
Tf will his teacher say? “Hajime why outside of school hours you are meeting with other people?”
Ah yes meeting with a nurse in a public place How lewd
He is a kid
Police
Bruh write some details How was he reborn Where His new family What are they like How does he look How was his second childhood Was it easy to adapt Did he miss his old family? Why did he choose serin Did he participate in middle school competitions?? Feels like i am reading a summary of chapters
Save me goat from Papa Perez and his pr😭
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Brutal? Yes Skilled? Not even close And barely anyone had a decent diet
Brother in the end he is just a voice YOU are the one making the final decisions YOU are the only one who can interact with other humans