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Supsooped2yrCommented*must be really strong
"You aren't afraid of me, huh?" she asked. "Then you much be really strong."- Supsooped2yrCommented
*didn't know it.
As the boy grew older, he got stronger. He was passively enchanting his body, but he didn't know. - Supsooped2yrCommented
should be: "managed to escape", or, "managed to get away".
Of the remaining 50, they had managed to capture about 40 of them by sedating them. About 8 of them were killed without other actions being possible, and finally, 2 had managed to escape away. - Supsooped2yrCommented
First sentence uses "has", second sentence uses "had". This is grammatically incorrect. Height doesn't grow. Height increases. "... could be seen to have brighter and brighter" -- makes no sense.
His height had grown by at least 2-3 feet. Every part of his body has been chiseled out in the perfect proportion. Even the faintly pale skin of Long Tao could be seen to have brighter and brighter. - Supsooped2yrCommented
This sentence makes no sense after the previous one.
In the last few days, Long Tao had cultivated arduously without taking even a single break. - Supsooped2yrPosted
Writing quality is bad. There are some chapter in which the author tries using proper grammer (probably with the help of some software), but a lot of chapters are just straight up horrible, and barely readable. From sentences that make sense and weird random words in places they don't belong, to flipping back and forth between first and third person perspectives and weird tense changes. It's all in there. The writing quality makes this novel hard to enjoy. Only give this a try if you're not really bothered by poor writing quality. Besides that, from what I've read, things all seem like a fairly generic xianxia novel. Nothing too special, but also not horribly boring.
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"amid the darkness of the darkness"????????
A lone silhouette could be seen amid the darkness of the darkness within the cave, the roar getting louder and louder, but the process still going on. - Supsooped2yrCommented
"I bring your father, couldn't take care of you." What kind of sentence is that even? If you're using software to correct your grammer, at least make sure the software doesn't "correct" it to something nonsensical.
A loud banging of fists could be heard, the seat on which Long Shen was sitting cracked. Tears fell from his eyes as he looked towards the sky" I am sorry my son. I bring your father, couldn't take care of you. It is the fate of someone who chose to sit on the seat of the clan leader." Long Shen decided to end the search operation. - Supsooped2yrCommented
*one could see
Within the ravine, one could a brief outline on the side of the mountain. The cliff ends with a shallow base. Amid the structure at the bottom, one could see the shape of a cave. - Supsooped2yrPosted
Writing quality an grammer are pretty good overall. There are a few mistakes here and there, but overall writing quality is far above most other novels on this site. Stability of updates -- dono. With story development is where the problems arise. I like the concept overall, the execution is however very poor. It runs head first into pretty much every trope and cliché. There are also a lot of plot holes. Than again, a lot of the plotholes are "fixed", by giving the MC an ability that simply makes people act like retards around him. It's honestly just a really stupid and lazy plot device. Very unsatisfying and unfun to read. Characters suffer from the same thing as the story. They are all very two dimensional. What you see is what you get and what you get is what you see. There is nothing to them. Pretty much any character serves only one goal, and that is to further the (poorly executed) plot. Non of the characters feel like real people. They don't do what that character should do, but they do what the author needs for the plot at that point in time. Again: very unsatisfying and unfun to read. The MC is also your stereotypical Japanese joy kid protagonist, that has no agency and just does what everyone around them tells them too. The world is fairly bland. It isn't really described all that much. At least, it isn't in the first 17 chapters. Because that's how far I got. So tldr: good writing quality, bad story, poor characters, bland world. Not recommended. You're better off just reading any random Japanese LN.
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His stats are so bugged, that his intelligence dropped into the negative numbers.
Zell reached into his pocket quickly and grabbed his way stone. He thought of the beast man village and teleported Rose and himself there. They landed outside of Leon's hut. - Supsooped2yrCommented
So people believe literally all his lies, no matter how stupid they are, but refuse to believe the truth. That is one dumb plot device.
"A likely tale." The citizen responded. "Hey everyone, this boy injured our hero!" - Supsooped2yrCommented
Hey, for a change she's right. He does have a puny intellect.
"Do try and keep up with me brother." Rose said. "For I am the hero of legend, and my path shall be fast paced and fraught with dangers your puny intellect could not even fathom." - Supsooped2yrCommented
The floor flew open? I'm guessing you meant the "door" flew open?
The floor flew open, and a small girl stood in the doorway. "Brother, are you not finished with your exams yet?" Rose yelled. "I am ready to go home! I have already been placed at the highest level for my exceptional ability." - Supsooped2yrCommented
"evens that defied all logic and reason" Pretty much the entire story so far.
"Hard worker and Master Artisan I am familiar with." Donovan explained. "You never tire from working, and everything you craft will be a masterpiece. If you were not the son of the duke, you would never have to want for money with those skills. Selective Memory and Shroud of Lies, I have not seen before." Donovan removed his hand from Zell's head. "But just because this old man has not seen them doesn't mean a thing!" He walked over to his bookshelf and began searching his books. He picked them up one by one, opening them and looked through the contents, until he finally found the one he was looking for. "I found information on the shroud of lies skill. Apparently by living a life of deception, it has caused everyone to believe this false narrative about you. I am sure you had events in your childhood that defied all logic and reason, which would have given people a hint or clue as to what you are. This skill must have shielded you, allowing you to remain shrouded in your lies." - Supsooped2yrCommented
And instead oh helping her or challenging any of these ideas, he's playing right into it.
"I doubt that." Zell said. "When I told him I didn't have stats in the teens he lost interest in me, of course it could just be that my little sister was born that very day. When she showed up, I became obsolete. What is worse is my father filled her head with how I failed and was not the hero of legend turning her into someone that always tries to prove she is better than me. I think she is just trying to stay relevant to my father, to remain loved." - Supsooped2yrCommented
*fights = fits
When they arrived at the school building, they were met at the gate by a security guard dressed in a suit of armor. "Halt!" He said, stopping the children in their tracks. He looked over them for a second. "Oh yes, Duke Kelbor's children, we were expecting you today. Allow me to explain how this institution works. First you will both have to be placed in your classes. We do not have grades or years here so the fact you are first-year students is irrelevant. What matters is your class, and your proficiency in said class. The classes at this academy are as follows: Knighthood, Mercantile, and Scholar. You will be placed in whatever class best fights your attributes, which we will uncover through a series of tests. Rose of course is exempt from the testing because of her status as the hero." The guard made eye contact with Zell. "But you, young man, must be placed."