Kid_Kayor
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Kid_Kayor1yrCommentedwhy is he surprised
"This Yulong was a spy!?" Lin Mu was shocked.- Kid_Kayor1yrPosted
Writing quality is wack, syntax isn't that good and we hear the same words over and over. Power ups just come from the most basic things making it so he'll be OP in no time. All the characters are one dimensional and nonsensical, I mean what's the point of a stepmother paying servants to torment a stepson with a dead mother and mental issues, his father also gave up on him, he's not going to inherit anything so what's the point. Give a reason for your characters actions and not make them do stuff just to fit the plot.
- Kid_Kayor2yrReplied to ArcaneWolf
Their names are pretty similar
The only reason to remain here would be to spend even more time with his family, but that was not a necessity anymore. Yersi was happy, Orthar was gone, and no one else from his family would die in the next millennia. This was the perfect time to return. - Kid_Kayor2yrReplied to ArcaneWolf
He left like ten chapters ago, have you even been reading
The only reason to remain here would be to spend even more time with his family, but that was not a necessity anymore. Yersi was happy, Orthar was gone, and no one else from his family would die in the next millennia. This was the perfect time to return. - Kid_Kayor3yrCommentedHaving made his decision, he picked one of the seals from the drawer and stored it in his ring, before sinking into the floor using phase. Lin Mu had been continually using phase for more than an hour now, along with his other skills. This had led to quite a lot of consumption of his spirit qi.
- Kid_Kayor3yrCommentedNoah laughed. "Yea...pretend. I guess even you don't think you're a baseball player."
- Kid_Kayor3yrCommented
*dinner
"Master diner have been served" - Kid_Kayor3yrCommentedUnexpectedly, Chen Chen waved his hand at them, and replied solemnly, "Don't ask what you shouldn't, unless you wish to invite fatal disasters upon yourself!"
- Kid_Kayor3yrCommented"Brother Chen, you don't have to bother about my sister's feelings. It is better for her to recognize this reality sooner rather than later."
- Kid_Kayor3yrCommented"Haha! So you mean I, Wu Wei, am a villain?!"
- Kid_Kayor3yrCommented"Traveler, your system has arrived. Congratulations on getting the invincible tracking system!"
- Kid_Kayor3yrCommented
Bruh the system runs on internet explorer
[Loading Welcome Gift... 0.10%] - Kid_Kayor3yrCommented
How bout giving head while you bow
However, Sally felt that she could do more. - Kid_Kayor3yrCommentedLin Mu subconsciously started repeating after the chants. The more he chanted, the more his rage grew, but at the same time made him feel comfortable. It was providing him a strange kind of solace. It was telling him that it was his right to be furious and the target of his rage was wrong and anyone that opposed him was to be exterminated.
- Kid_Kayor3yrCommentedCh 6 Sadistic Pleasure