Nice experience reading this to chapter 21. I would have given 5 star if the girls which betrayed MC were killed or not mentioned from now on but from how the story is going i dnt think its gonna happen. So.........

very bad writing. Author puts chapters as author notes and also put immersion breaking narrations which kill the involvement of the reader. Also the idea of onepiece system is interesting but the execution of it is very bad and boaring. Example: the Author could take some other interesting Fruit which would make the reading much interesting. Also in a cultivation world the pace the MC is developing is very slow. Also mixing of onepiece system and cultivation makes is very uninteresting. The integrations between the characters is also not executed properly to keep the readers engaged. All the chapters feels very boring , lackluster and very short. I would like to see author improve and will edit this review later if it gets better.

Its verrrrrrrrrrrryyyyyyyyyyyy slllllooooooooow pace, It took 20 chapters for prologue and its been 30 chapters and the mc is still in baby phase. Wow. Even if the story is like diamond readers like me loose interest in it if it drags on way to much. At first there was anticipation then slowly i started loosing interest in what will happen next then i had to drop it completely. I guess it might interest few people but this fanfic is not for me.

man if the rewrite is so bad i wonder how much bad the original was?? Bruh your concept is ok but u are running to fast , faster than a Lockheed SR-71 Blackbird and sometimes teleporting and skipping major keypoints which makes the story interesting. Please improve the story and remove the major randomness and give some backstory or introduce the powers and stuff. This will make the fanfic way better.

what the hek is going on with this fanfic?? The randomness is so cancerous that it started to hurt my brain. I tried putting my brain on auto mode and tried to go more than 10 chapters but i failed. Suddenly gaining powers, suddenly practicing in dojo makes u cut a building, suddenly we know that he is part of an organization, suddenly he already had emiya's power. This novel seems to be written by a child suffering from adhd.

Very bad , very bland, nothing interesting. Its like i am reading a log book. The MC is way overpower but its ok if its slice of life but no, nothing like that. MC is doing whatever he wants. Also he summons a bunch of other characters from different anime and couldnot portray the characters well enough. I read upto chapter 16 and nothing interesting is going on. Also change of POV to other summons is so bad and immersion breaking. All the time i am reading it fells like i am reading nothing. Introduction of sudden OC without proper explanations and many more things which makes this novel atrocious to read. The novel is very fast pace which is also another cons.

More chapters <3

lmao u contradict what you say in the same sentence and you tell me i am ignorant wow.

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exactly thats why even after so many chapters there are no reviews xD

i predicted that waaay before. If a fanfic is made on a unlikeable ripoff, then one can guess how bad the fanfiction be like.

Please read what i said in the previous comment then start commenting without getting your ego hurt.

no one cares. I read uptill chapter 140 and i liked it very much , no romantic situation till now and It doesn't matter to me whether it is harem or not as the story is really good. So stop being insecure and start reading.

I read uptill chapter 140 and it was an awesome read. Very engaging, less annoying mysteries, great strategies and great kingdom building. I am very much looking forward to the technologies MC bring in his world. Lots of great possibilities with the story. Until this point i find to romantic interaction with anyone but looking forward to the future. Author cannot wait for more chapters.

this must be authors main account

wow nice job replying on your own comment from different account

what are these bot comments?? are u guys friend with this creepy f-k or something??

paid review confirmed! and a very weird justification

paid review confirmed!