YingJun
Absolutely Charming
Writing
of reading
1788
Read books
Badges
14Moments
447
YingJun16hCommentedread from literotica. com
The reason for that is my sheer lack of experience in 'real' sex and how you write them.- YingJun3dCommentedWrite a comment if you want more
- YingJun4dCommented
1 short chapter felt lacking to make a review and this felt more like a trailer and a synopsis at the same time. But from what I have read, World building aside, you need to tone down the bullying aspect from supporting characters as it seems ridiculous and breaks immersion. You don't need to lessen the degree of bullying but just make it more subtle. For example, an extra doesn't have to verbally tell that the MC is a fatso but they can make him feel like one by producing pig sounds whenever the MC passes by. And in my opinion, grammar wise, it is perfect. As for the plot, the idea seems interesting seeing the tags you've included. I just hope the focus wasn't on how much he was bullied but on how he would enact his revenge. And also I hope you won't follow the footsteps of this novel "A depressed Kendo Player Possesses a Bastard Aristocrat" . Anyways, I wish to read more of this.
Ch 20 Read for 2 bonus chapters [New Book] - YingJun4dCommented
Now this. This is something I know a teacher would say.
The next day followed the same painful routine. In class, Ms. Brown didn't miss a chance to humiliate me. "Mark, your work is terrible. Are you even trying?" The students laughed, their mockery ringing in my ears. - YingJun4dCommented
This broke my immersion. As no teacher, aside from fictional characters, would speak that way towards a student no matter how dumb they are. Except if said teacher has a personal vendetta against a student.
She handed out our assignments, and I noticed mine was much harder than the others. "You need to work harder, Mark. You're just too dumb," she said, her tone dripping with contempt. I glanced around, seeing the smirks on my classmates' faces. They enjoyed my humiliation. - YingJun4dCommented
Where are the whales? now is your time to shine
[I'm testing it out, so, the first donation will be rewarded with a total of +2 chapters published.] - YingJun1mthCommented
Why does he need to bite Chastiefol? We all know that Chastiefol can be controlled mentally.
Futarou put Chastiefol by his mouth, got on all fours, and growled excitedly. - YingJun2mthCommented
you want digital cookies? Just play Cookie Clicker. it works online and offline
Editor's note 1: In the MTL and many other copy paste 'translator' versions (I '…' translator because let's face it, all these people are just copy pasting the MTL with minor and infrequent edits here and there), I see many comparisons about S.H.I.E.L.D and something called SPEAR (???). I found out that SPEAR is actually like a Chinese version of SHIELD in Earth-616. Huh, you learn something new every day. Anyways, since this whole setting is in the MCU, it felt weird to have that sudden out-of-pocket comparison between SHIELD and SPEAR and also the whole MC being a part of SPEAR. So, I just removed it entirely and added my own two cents of how I think this scene in particular should have played out. Like I mean there was a long ass saga in the original MTL about how it would be hard to find Luke and blah blah Chinese idioms and blah blah. Hope I at least made it bearable for the general audience out there! And if I have, maybe can I get some cookies! This Takodachi needs his daily dose of WAH! - YingJun2mthReplied to paz_reisiBlowjob, Thighjob.
- YingJun2mthReplied to Master4thWall
where is shoko??
B-Komachi had returned. - YingJun2mthCommented
ya'll complaining about the alien. but what if she is the alien instead of the og.
'Come to think of it... Are those aliens present in this universe too?' Damon thought, aware of his reincarnation as Yuuya Tenjou in this world of JJK where he shouldn't belong. He still doesn't know if this world is just JJK while he's an anomaly or an amalgam of two fictional realities. - YingJun2mthCommented
Author, You mentioned earlier that Miku used swords. Wouldn't it be more reasonable if she used sound magic and more of a back liner rather than a front liner since she is incredibly timid?
[Image] - YingJun2mthReplied to Sky_TheEnder132
Yes you did, but the thing is, it did not manage to capture Riveria herself. She is a mature beauty that has this strict office lady vibes. Although the steak you served was good, I want a well done, not medium rare.
Her hair instead of it hanging in its usual ponytail, was carefully brushed to her left shoulder, a singular blade coming down into drill locks as they fell over her form fitting getup. Her skin was smooth and fresh, and they could smell a light perfume coming from her which was odd because elves tended not to wear such things, instead preferring natural herbs or grass. This was completed by a pair of black high heels. - YingJun2mthCommented
Hey, I'm still here. I absolutely love the comedic side of this novel but I highly suggest you explore the slow-life genre as a filler chapters. You can even write a drama scene if you want. Don't restrict yourself with a genre just because you put it in the tags. Anyways, I greatly enjoy your fanfic and I hope you can get out of the slump.
So I'm too restricted, and the comedy a lot of you came from in the first place is not there anymore. - YingJun2mthCommented
We all know where this is going 😉
"Couldn't go to sleep?" He asked her. - YingJun2mthCommented
okay, those who have some ai image generator, please post the result here.
Her hair instead of it hanging in its usual ponytail, was carefully brushed to her left shoulder, a singular blade coming down into drill locks as they fell over her form fitting getup. Her skin was smooth and fresh, and they could smell a light perfume coming from her which was odd because elves tended not to wear such things, instead preferring natural herbs or grass. This was completed by a pair of black high heels. - YingJun2mthCommented
We dont feel anything when we do it to ourselves. just like tickling. but when others do it, oh boy, they are sensitive.
"Ayra, unlike women, we don't feel anything, so even if you suck my nipples nothing will happen," Garnt muttered as he kept patting his aunt, who was sitting on his cock acting as a sheathe to it, but she didn't move since she wanted some intimate time. - YingJun2mthCommented
Author, in my opinion, this is a bad move. Unless you greatly alter their own world, it would be dumb if they experience the same hardship they went through. For example, Rias, if she can't capitalize on the gift given to her and went through the same events as in canon, then it is not their fault, it is your fault as that would simply be copy-pasting with an extra character which is hardly considered a fanfic but plagiarism.
Ch 3 Chapter 3 - The members - YingJun2mthCommented
Welp. This changes everything. He can farm low level monsters for stats. Now that Wrath doesn't exist, his stats won't be reduced. If he copied Seiya Ryuuguuin (MC of Cautious Hero) then nobody can defeat him.
All weakness had been removed. ]