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Translation takes a dive after some chapters, then later on it's just repeating chapters. You spend your money only to get repeating chapters, lots of repeating chapters.
So just before he got bind by the chains he says he feels power surging in his body but in that chaotic situation how does he know he has truly gained something? That's why at this point I feel like the voice in his head should begin guiding him. Help him understand what the binds/shackles mean and resolve he needs to break free of them and grasp his new potential. As I've said before the awakening needs to be emphasized some more such as the sensation of this new force slowly coursing through his body empowering him to break the shackles instead him just shouting.
I'm not going to talk about the MC's decisions because I understand why his broken mind sent him down that path. What disappointed me was the awakening it could and should be so much more because right now it's lackluster and his lines during the awakening was well boring. I have my own ideas but I'm here to read the author vision on this so I'd like for the author to rewrite that part and make it more impactful.
Throwing logic at an emotional decision especially when the individual is emotionally unstable, come on obviously they are going to make bad decisions but that doesn't make them stupid just emotionally unhinged.