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are they werewolves or shapeshifters?! please make up your mind! those are two different creatures
what's the GIF from?
still doesn't clear things up. the boy was in total isolation in the cell. I thought at first that he died and Alexander took over but now it seems like Alexander is an alternate personality
See I've been so confused since the end of the prologue. was the boy stealing from people and teaching the orphan girl math Alexander this whole time? there wasn't a confirmation to this and it seemed like we were reading an entirely different character
Huh? what's the point?
the novel has a lot of potential and I'm liking it so far. to make it better, I think having someone edit your work will help with the flow cuz some errors are popping up every now and then. Also some of the transitions to third person POV when giving background info on the other characters seems a bit random. I suggest taking your time hashing out details in the story that paint a more descriptive story than having frequent power trips. Show more struggling in this survival type world in not just battles but also in other stuff like scrounging up food, water, shelter, weapons, etc. It's fine that the system gives them reward for weapons but I also think it happens convienently. instead they should display intellect in using resources available to them. personally, if the system shop was ONLY for buying information and not essentials like HP and MP potions it would better as it forces the characters to be careful, plan, and improvise. plus it would make more sense to work together strategically in a group than this whole in-group fighting that seems unnecessary. if I was the mc, I just wouldn't deal with all of the drama cuz it means no one can be trusted even a little bit to have my back in a fight. that's very dangerous. might as well go solo. sorry for the long message. I do like your work though. it reminds me of outside of time a little bit and it could be just as good
the ape was rated as deadly vs the crimson demon bear that was rated as special. that shows it's already stronger and so it makes no sense to be so cautious like that
this part needs work. the are is strong enough already. it could have killed the bear. clarification is needed
drinking one potion per second? sounds wasteful and again unrealistic. I doubt the enemy would give home time to drink it if the ape is that fast
This is honestly an unreasonable thing to do in a fight where your opponent is your equal or better. fights are unpredictable and stuff like this can get you killed. especially if you're ambushed
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He's twelve now? it's only been a year and some time no? at most 2 years
Love you too bro! We're best buds!