Jonathanjoestar
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nothing new or unique the grammar is bad and there is no excuse now a days with all the grammar tools available online for free. the dialogue sounds between the characters sounds like the uncoherent nonsense said by someone with ADHD. the characters are stupid and so is the descriptions of the scenes.
There are so many wrong things I don't know where to start. The pacing is horrible, the plot holes are massive and the rate at which the story is progressing is even worse. the amount of misinformation about nen in this novel makes this difficult to read as HxH fan. A simple google search could have fixed this. The characters are simple and one dimensional the descriptions are lacking and story in itself feels childish. This is clearly a newbie writer with no experience and no background so i can't really expect a masterpiece but this simply isn't good. maybe the author should start reading more good stories to understand how to write one before trying again.