A quick review of this one since it is short.
Writing Quality: It can be enhanced but overall quite decent, the symbols you use to express thoughts and the quotes sometimes twist and I don't know if they're speaking or thinking, also, sometimes you mix POVs in one scene which is not odd but you don't specify all the times who thought what or who said what.
Stability of Updates: Can't really say I can give a proper evaluation of this one as I recently caught up, but it just went into Hiatus, possible drop risk considering the length of the author's existing novels.
Story Development: Quite well written, I don't have much to say here as the story is steadily advancing, a little slow but the background setting is being done well for the future events.
Character Design: You came for Yanderes and hell, Yanderes you will find. I don't really like MC's personality tho.
World Background: The worlds' geography hasn't been properly explained, we were given an introduction by the system and I believe that's enough for now. However, you don't give a proper ambientation description for the escenes.
Now my personal opinion, spoilers ahead.
Things I like:
- These are true YANDERES, not the usual wannabe yandere people write in this site, a Yandere sharing her man? bro that doesn't exist. Harem and Yandere don't go by and if there is it will just be a constant onslaught between the harem to see who gets MC, and that's exactly what happens in this novel.
The author even takes it to a whole new level, these girls are schemers, it won't be as simple as taking a knife and just shuking the rival in the GUT, hide the body and look for senpai, no, here the bitches will scheme their way inside MC's pants while getting rid of the others in the process and I love that.
- I like things that are crude but not overly frustrating. Let me tell you reader if you're one cocky wish-fulfilling novels fan, then get out of here
because this is not for sensible people. MC gets cucked at the beginning tho, it is not that intense, but the betrayal can be felt a little. His mother in the other life is a dual cultivation cauldron to say in a way, his father just fks her and leaves (nothing is overly detailed so no issue here as well but you can feel bad for the mother), his father doesn't care about him, his brothers bully him, and so on. This should be a bad thing, but if the author manages it well it could create a rollercoaster of emotions in the readers that might be positive for the novel.
Now things that I don't like:
- I don't like that you're making something like a second ATG here by making the situation impossibly hard for MC to actually be able to do anything to reverse his situation in another way different than whoring himself to the bitches or manipulating.
My meaning is, he won't be able to get strong enough to achieve anything by strength, so his only solution is to manipulate the girls in a way that he will slowly get strong to a point that he can actually do something. Doesn't that resemble Yun Che a lot? the difference is Yun Che knew how to take advantage of a Tight, well, somehow. But this MC is totally clueless about his advantage.
Let's put an example. MC can't cultivate till his veins or whatever it is awakened and that depends on talent, well although that's a disadvantage that you yourself put in the story as the author that doesn't prevent him from asking resources and valuables from his step-mom, you might think that if he showed such a mature mind from early on it might get him in trouble...
But the bitch is totally crazy for him!!! she won't mind fk all if he asks her for a sword or for pills or for anything that might help him, and if she doesn't want he only has to cry or ignore her and she would just heed... That's just how much infatuated she is.
It is also hard for me to believe that such an important person in his sect as is his step-mother, she's basically the strongest or the second strongest after the father with such a big background yet no one knew that she had adopted a son from a concubine? MC should've been known by the whole sect by now!!!! His father doesn't pay attention to him when he was with the concubine/cauldron, understandable... But the hell won't he pay attention to him when he's basically been together with his wife more than he himself, even if he's just a kid.
At the very least all his brothers and sisters should know him and to some point fear or respect or limit themselves around him... Considering the step-mom can call their deceased mother a 'slut' and leave without an issue in front of their father. Yet nothing like that happens, they still bully him even though his step-mother is the most feared individual in the sect.
His sister let's say messes up with his step-mother's cultivation (supposing it was her) and makes a move two days later to seize him permanently, I can only imagine that his step-mother got killed and won't come back 'cause hey, you never thought what was gonna happen to you or your brothers once she came back? lol.
Anyway, it is a great prospect but needs more work.
