I am really am enjoying it so far it’s amazing that you’re not just taking the story beats from the original stories one by one so far that’s the only thing I’m getting from other infinite story books yours is something very unique and I found myself enjoying every bit of it please continue to write such an amazing work.
To be honest, this a great work with potential but i still feel like somethings are missing. These are my opinions tho: Character development; This is a wizarding world, the character is a wizard and i don’t know what u have in plan for the mc’s character but his current character really ain’t satisfying. For a wizard, a dark wizard at that, i feel he is a bit too emotional than he is supposed to be. He has some subtle naivity( calm + curiosity could do the trick regarding his inspiration talent)which is not good for him as a dark wizard who is pursuing the ‘information manipulation path’. He lack the ruthlessness, calculative/ schemic mind required. His control over his emotions is also a bit lacking and his will is a bit too weak for an earthling who hold secrets hidden in his memories which he definetly cannot afford for others to see. Also, he lacks insights into the human heart and mind which is will be fatal to him if no change is made. With his knowledge of novels he read on eath he should know better than anyone the consequences of letting too much emotions affect his cause. As a dark wizard, his thirst for knowledge, rational thinking and spirit for reseach into the mysteries of the the multiverse is weak. It’d be cool if he had some time powers added to his rune tho. He could also create his own A.I to help with his informational path. Also, about his information manipulation and will path, you can gain insights from “ Cyher in marvel comics”, “ the middle chapters of the novel; ‘Original Seeker’ on comrademao.com or mtlnovel.com. Agian these are just my thoughts if you deem them useless for what you have in store for your work you can ignore it.
The first couple of chapters are actually good then it starts getting more confused like at one point they talk about vow and i’ve never even learned what the he did because they going to battle scenes after that it just could’ve been better the potential is there towards the last chapters like 50 at writing this I was just so confused
I hadn’t even realised how far into the book I’d reached until I paused to check the time. Its definietly a great story, I’m going to read till the end. All I have to say is that there’s a lot of information condensed into one chapter. It can be a little overwhelming as a reader, but apart from that I really am enjoying it. Great job 👍
So far the story seems very enjoyable. There are a lot of interesting ideas, but the writing quality and the details throughout the story need a bit fleshing out. I feel like this can potentially become a very good novel. :) Actually, I'm interested in giving feedback and editing your chapters before release. Contact me if you are interested. 🐈🦉