Pretty good work so far. I'm only at chapter five, but it has decent elements of development and comedy. The writing quality is readable, but could use some revision. Overall, I'd say the story is well paced, but I'd like to see more magic development in the upcoming chapters. For prospective readers, you should know this is kind of like a slice of life story. It starts slow, but feels like it's progressing well. Thanks for the read!👍
Overall, this story is one of the best Harry Potter Fanfictions ever made, and it’s pretty sad that the author abandoned it.... The Main Character is very abnormal compared with other fanfictions’ MC’s- he doesn’t go with the current, he goes against it. Ps: Spoiler!!! The two-people-in-One thing going on with the MC is VERY COOL!!! I mean, haven’t we all wondered where the soul of the person that the MC has taken over went? Well, this story answers that question in a rather bizarre (and very cool) way!
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What ruins this story completely is the split personality and the split magic core. It was fine up to that point, however, I despise stories like this. I thought that they would merge straight away and make the soul strength double or something. But now we have an extra constantly talking in his head... The split-core makes no sense either. I get if it halved his magic but you split it light and dark. Magic is magic... there is no light and dark side this isn't fcking StarWars xD Spells can have an element but magic is magic...